Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-07-30
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
It is undeniable that other nations language is crucial for some purpose. In this regards in 21st century to learn each and every language become an important place. Some pupils say that the learning a foreign language is in order to travel or work in foreign nations . On the rest hand some says that these are not the only reason.
To commence with, there are several reasons Firstly Financial purpose to explain it, to work in foreign nations we should know about their language and culture for survival.
Secondly, travel is also a reason to learn a foreign language because we can't enjoy our foreign trip with knowledge of there language and culture. Moreover, the development is also plays an important role to learn more languages.
According I think that it is better habit to learn foreign language because it helps in development of mental health and our communication skills also improve.
To conclude, although there are various reasons to learn foreign language search as trevel, work, development of mental health and to improve communication skills yet it is not happen that by learning new language we start giving more importance to it and ignore our mother tounge.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 199 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas, as the arguments provided are superficial and lack sufficient supporting evidence or examples. While you have addressed both sides of the argument and stated an opinion, the brevity of the response means the discussion is underdeveloped. To improve, you must expand on your points by providing concrete examples and explaining the 'why' and 'how' behind your arguments. The conclusion is also quite abrupt and does not effectively synthesize the points discussed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression of ideas is often hindered by limited use of cohesive devices. Transitions like 'To commence with' and 'Secondly' are used, but they are often followed by fragmented or repetitive sentences. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the flow between sentences feels mechanical rather than natural. To achieve a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that is fully supported by the subsequent sentences.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally basic and repetitive. There are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'other nations language' instead of 'foreign languages' and 'better habit' instead of 'beneficial practice'. The range of vocabulary is limited, which restricts your ability to express complex ideas precisely. To improve, try to incorporate more topic-specific vocabulary related to linguistics, cognitive development, and global communication. Avoid repeating the same phrases and focus on using synonyms to enhance the variety of your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the reader's understanding. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'development is also plays'), incorrect article usage, and awkward sentence structures (e.g., 'it is not happen that'). There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the existing sentences are often simple or contain errors in punctuation and word order. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction before attempting more complex structures. Pay close attention to verb tenses and pluralization, as these are consistent areas of difficulty in your writing.
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