Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

There are some people who says that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel or work in a foreign country, while other says that these are not only the main reasons to learned the foreign language, In my opinion these are not main reasons of learning language.

The former said to learning the foreign language is due to tarvel or work in foreign country. The people said due to learning the foreign language has benefits to travel because it was for people to easily handle theirself in other country. Through the learning of foreign they easily manage their business and they communicate easily with other people and they eaily maintain their life in other culture. To know the other culture ad activities it is necessary for people to learn language.

On the hand the later says the main reason is not only for travel they say this not only way to learning language. In my opinion they say because For instance, many students from developing countries learn languages like English or German specifically to secure high-paying jobs abroad. Similarly, for travellers, speaking the local language of a destination is highly beneficial. It helps them communicate easily with locals, ask for directions, and buy food without any hassle. Consequently, people view language learning as a practical tool for survival in a foreign environment.

In conclusion, the individual say to learning the foreign language is way to travel and work in foreign country. In my opinion the learning of foreign language id due to do practicle work or understand with other culture.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both views and provides an opinion, but the development is inconsistent. While you mention that language learning has benefits beyond travel and work, the explanation is repetitive and lacks depth. The argument is somewhat confused, as the second body paragraph seems to contradict your initial stance by focusing heavily on the practical benefits of travel and work again. To improve, ensure each paragraph clearly distinguishes between the two perspectives and provides distinct, well-supported reasons for your own opinion. The conclusion is also quite brief and does not effectively summarize the main points discussed in the body paragraphs.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as the phrase 'On the hand the later says', which is grammatically incorrect and disrupts the flow. Referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to follow which group of people you are referring to. While there is an attempt to use linking words like 'For instance' and 'Consequently', the overall structure feels disjointed. Improving the transition between sentences and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. You frequently use basic phrases like 'learning the foreign language' and 'in other country'. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'handle theirself' instead of 'manage' or 'look after themselves', and 'practicle work' which is imprecise. While you attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary, the lack of variety and the frequent errors in collocation prevent the essay from reaching a higher band. To improve, try to incorporate more precise synonyms and learn common collocations related to education and global communication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the essay that occasionally impede communication. Basic subject-verb agreement is often incorrect, such as 'people who says' and 'other says'. You also struggle with article usage ('in other country' instead of 'in another country') and verb forms ('to learned' instead of 'to learn'). The sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at complex sentences often contain errors in punctuation or word order. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles and prepositions, before attempting more complex structures.

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