Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Today's world, transportation system plays a crucial role in our daily life. Administration should provide enough budget on railways rather than roads. I partly agree with the statement because both has several drawbacks. In this essay, I will discuss about negative side of railways and roads system.
One the one hand, Railways has various types of lackings including facilities. There are some different types of facilities problems such as bad rail line, delay schedule and unclean indoor space. This is primarily because the railway authorities can not focuses these areas. That's why, passengers are suffering when they travel and it decreases their intension to travel journey in future by train. For instance, a recent study conducted by Dr. Abul Kalam Azad, a renowned social researcher of Dhaka University, revealed that around 25% passengers loss their intension by travel a train journey in near future.
One the other hand, lack of wide and broken road is a important disadvantages of roads. As a result, regular accident occurs people life in danger, which is responsible for general people health injury. On account of broken road usually passengers journey could not suitable or comfortable. From my own experience, I meet a road accident due to bad and broken roads, when i was riding my bike. It happens major injury, which take two months of recovery time.
In conclusion, not only railways system, but also roads has demerits, which suffers general people and passengers. Governments should take proper step to maintain a good quality system and spend money on both railways and roads.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 2.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 2.0
The response is completely off-topic. The prompt asks for a discussion on the reasons for learning a foreign language, whereas the essay discusses the merits and drawbacks of railway versus road transportation. Because the student failed to address the task prompt entirely, the response cannot be assessed for task achievement in relation to the specific question asked. According to IELTS criteria, a response that is off-topic must be penalised heavily as it fails to address any part of the task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay follows a standard structure with an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the logical progression is severely hampered by the fact that the content is irrelevant to the prompt. While the student uses some cohesive devices such as 'On the one hand' and 'In conclusion', the internal logic within the paragraphs is weak due to repetitive phrasing and grammatical errors. Paragraphing is present, but the lack of a coherent argument related to the topic makes the overall flow ineffective.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary range is quite limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic terms and struggles with collocations, such as 'lackings' instead of 'deficiencies' or 'shortcomings', and 'intension' instead of 'intention' or 'motivation'. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'general people' and 'bad rail line'. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey the student's ideas about transportation, but it lacks the precision and variety required for higher band scores. The errors in word formation are frequent.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that affect the clarity of the writing. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'railways has', 'both has', 'roads has'), article usage (e.g., 'a important disadvantages'), and sentence structure (e.g., 'it decreases their intension to travel journey'). The student attempts some complex sentences, but they are often marred by errors, such as 'As a result, regular accident occurs people life in danger'. These errors are persistent and occasionally make the meaning difficult to follow.
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