Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-15
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Most of the people say that reason for learning a foreign language is not order to travel or work in a foreign country, weather other people say that only reasons someone should learn a foreign language, the beacuse people communicate with other clients in their organization.
Overall. the people are learn one other country language because the night duty people can communicate with other countries mostly at the night time and for recurting the company learning foreign language is one the best opportunity to geeting a Job in MNC organization.
On the one hand, Most of the people say the only reason for learning a foreign language is order to travel or work in a foreign country, the students mostly going for higher education to improve skills in their further occupations, while some individuals travel various places at the time foreign language was useful, other some citizens can work as a part-time or full-time role in the work place various people are coming to their resturants they use for communication for foreign language, For example people believe that they had various trips in the world, countries hang out with friends or family at the time they will communicate foreign countries and other some people are in foreign countries with their higher education they work as a part-time in the resturants while sending, receiving orders communicate in their native language.
On the other hand, Most of the people say not only reason someone should learn a foreign language, some people are professional in some organization they communicate with clients the company was divides into some major branches in various countries at the time they learning foreign language was useful, For Example that two students has went for a interview one student has extra skills like various languages like Spanish, Germany, other student who konw only one english language at the time the job will obsuetly occupied for student who learn different foreign language.
In conclusion, Not only one or two reasons to learn foreign language it has many ways to learn language and various time it can be useful, it ts best to enhance skills in their free time.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address both views outlined in the prompt (reasons for travel/work versus other reasons) and offers a basic opinion that learning a language has multiple benefits. However, the development of ideas is severely hindered by significant expression issues. Many arguments, such as the mention of night-duty workers and MNC recruitment, are introduced abruptly without clear elaboration. The student touches upon travel, higher education, and communicating with clients, but the underlying positions are often muddled by broken syntax. While the prompt is partially addressed, the ideas remain limited and under-developed, aligning closely with a Band 5 descriptor.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, including an introduction, body paragraphs beginning with transition phrases like 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand', and a conclusion. However, the logical progression is frequently broken. Paragraphs contain sprawling, run-on sentences that make it difficult to follow the flow of thought. Cohesive devices such as 'weather' (instead of whether) and repetitive phrases like 'Most of the people say' are misused or mechanical. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it hard to determine which pronouns refer to which nouns. Overall organization is attempted, but cohesion is heavily faulty, justifying a Band 4.0 score.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive. Throughout the response, the student relies on elementary phrases such as 'learning a foreign language', 'foreign country', and 'different foreign language'. There are numerous word-choice and spelling errors, such as 'weather' for whether, 'recurting' for recruiting, 'geeting' for getting, 'resturants' for restaurants, and 'obsuetly' for obviously. These errors and the extremely limited range of less common lexical items restrict the vocabulary to a Band 4.0 level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the essay. The text consists largely of massive run-on sentences joined by commas rather than proper punctuation or conjunctions (e.g., 'while some individuals travel various places at the time foreign language was useful, other some citizens can work...'). There are frequent errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the people are learn'), and word forms. Complex structures are attempted through clauses like 'while sending, receiving orders communicate...', but they are structurally broken and frequently impede comprehension. This falls under the Band 4 descriptor.
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