Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Some individuals say that some people learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a other country. But others say that these are not the only reaseons someone should learn a foreign language.

In my opinion and knowledge,some people does not learning a foreign language in other country. He works in a foreign country. Because they earn to the money.

First of all,the first reason is wrong that some individuals learning a foreign language in the other country. He does not learning the language. Because he learns language in the sitting home in different apps. He does not learning the language in other country. For instance,one person take 3 million only learning the language in foreign country. This is the wrong think. According to my mind,people does not learning the language in other country.

On the other hand,some people right think that he works in a foreign country. Because he works in other country to earn money. Every people needs to the money in life. For example,many citizens the children admission in big school. So,the children needs to the money school fees,and many things. So,the main reason is that some people works in foreign country.

The third reason is that some individulas travel to the foreign country. Because he enjoys to the other country. He travels families together and enjoys,fun,chill together. So,the few reasons why people travel to the foreign country.

To sum up,people does not learning the language in foreign country. He works and travel to the othery country. Because he earns the money and needs in life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response attempts to discuss both views regarding why people learn a foreign language and provides a personal opinion. However, the ideas are severely underdeveloped, repetitive, and at times difficult to follow due to expression issues. For example, phrases like 'According to my mind, people does not learning the language in other country' fail to clearly articulate a coherent argument for the first view. The position is also somewhat contradictory and confusing. Consequently, the performance aligns best with Band 4 descriptors, where the task is addressed only minimally or tangentially, and ideas lack clear development or support throughout the text.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The text is organized into paragraphs with basic transition markers such as 'First of all' and 'On the other hand'. However, the progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by broken logic and unclear referencing. For instance, the pronoun referencing is often confusing, as seen in 'He works in a foreign country. Because they earn to the money.' Additionally, repetitive phrasing and mechanical transitions create a choppy reading experience. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is weak. These features place the response firmly at Band 4, where information and ideas are not arranged in a consistently coherent manner.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and frequently incorrect in form or collocation. Examples include 'earn to the money', 'children admission in big school', and 'wrong think'. Words are often misused grammatically, such as 'reaseons' (spelling error) and 'learning' instead of 'learn'. While the writer manages to communicate very basic concepts related to work and travel, the lexical range is extremely limited and errors frequently strain the reader's understanding. This reflects the criteria for Band 4, characterized by basic vocabulary and errors that impede clear communication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the essay, with persistent, heavy errors in basic sentence structures, subject-verb agreement, and tense usage. Examples include 'some people does not learning', 'one person take 3 million only learning', and 'every people needs to the money'. Simple sentence structures dominate, and any attempt at complexity results in severe grammatical breakdown. There are very few error-free sentences, and meaning is frequently distorted or obscured by the frequency of errors. This corresponds directly to Band 4, where grammar is very limited and frequent errors distort the intended meaning.

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