Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Some people believe that to learn the foreign language we want to travel or work in a foreign

country that is not the correct answer based up on my opinion there are many ways to learn the foreign language to communicate with others while we are travelling in the foreigncountry

this paragram says that to learn the foreign language we want to travel or we can work at the foreign companys to learn the foreign langauge to communicate with others in the foreign while we want any information about it we can talk with other foreign people because they dont know another language they only know the foreign langauge to communicate with us and other delivery peoples are also talking in the foreign language that is also difficult to skeep with others that why we want to learn the foreign language that is very important to speak with others while to gain the knowledge and other information about things

And the another point of view is these are not the only reasons why should learn a foreign language the main reason to leran a foreign language because of the most of people in the foreign they dont know the telugu and the hindi they know only one language foreign that why we can also learn the foreign language to communicate are to talk with the foreign peoples that is main reason to learn the foreign language when we want to travel to the foreign countrys we can learn the foreign language to servey in the foreign country that is the amin reason

I can tell one example that i am faceing now about the foreign language

Now i a,m pursing the betech final year after completing the betech i want to complete my masters that why i want to complete my masters i am chossing the country GERMANY to study masters but in the germany most of the people are speak in the german language but we w

know only the telugu,english,little bit of hindi,that we want now on wards we can learn the german language to communicate with others and most of the supermarkets in the german are spoken in the german language only to work in the stores are also we can talk in the german language that why now on wars we can learn the german language

That the the foreign languages has more demand that why we can learn the foreign langaues from many ways not only travelling,or working in the foreign company there are multiple ways to learn the langaues and there are many coauching centers to learn the langauges an dwe have many websites also

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address the topic by discussing travel and work as reasons for learning a language, and you also mention communication and study as broader motivations. Your personal example about planning to study in Germany is relevant and helps show why German would be useful to you. However, the two views are not clearly explained as contrasting arguments: the response mostly repeats that language is needed to communicate, and the view that learning is worthwhile for reasons beyond travel or work is not developed with distinct examples. Your own position is also difficult to identify because the opening says the first view is “not the correct answer,” while the conclusion mainly restates that there are multiple reasons. State your opinion directly and support each view with a separate, developed reason.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the response into an opening, discussion, personal example and conclusion, and the Germany example gives the essay a recognisable focus. However, progression between ideas is difficult to follow because several points are repeated within very long, loosely connected sentences. For example, the first body paragraph moves from travel to work, communication, delivery workers and gaining information without clear links or development. Connectors such as “that why” and “And the another point of view” are repeated and do not always show the relationship between ideas accurately. Use separate paragraphs for each view, then your opinion, and make each paragraph develop one main point with clear referencing and transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the general subject, with relevant terms such as “communicate,” “foreign language,” “masters” and “supermarkets.” However, the range is basic and highly repetitive: “foreign language” and “learn” recur throughout, while several phrases are imprecise or difficult to understand, including “delivery peoples,” “servey in the foreign country” and “the foreign companys.” Spelling errors such as “langauge,” “chossing” and “coauching” also reduce accuracy. These limitations sometimes make the reader work to infer your meaning. Build a more precise set of topic phrases, such as “study abroad,” “employment opportunities,” “interact with local residents” and “access everyday services,” and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to express reasons and examples, but sentence structures are mostly simple or joined into long run-on sentences, and grammatical errors frequently make relationships between ideas unclear. For instance, “Some people believe that to learn the foreign language we want to travel or work” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “most of the people in the foreign they dont know” has problems with sentence construction and agreement. There are also recurring errors with articles, verb forms and sentence boundaries, as in “most of the supermarkets in the german are spoken.” Try building shorter, complete sentences first, then practise controlled complex forms using “because,” “although” and “for example.” Check each sentence for a clear subject and verb, correct tense, and appropriate punctuation.

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