Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The lecture focuses on that people's learning a foreign language is in order to travel to work in a foreign country. But some people's learn this for start their own business in foreign countries. furthermore, there are many types of people living in their country without speaking in english but they face so many problems. The lecture also hilights it's a big issue for them who don't speak very well and not able to understand anything and it is also right that people want to learn and speak foreign language because they want to move abroad for studies and working in foreign countries, everyone have their own rights to live their lives a better future for their family members and their loveones, i also have a girlfriend she lives in australia, she born in australia so whenever we talk we face too many problems when she speaks with me about her day and her life I can't understand very well that's why i also want to learn foreign language she forced me to learn english language very well sometimes i say her that i cant fo this but she encouraged ne she supported me she understands me so that day i decide to do this for her i want to be make sure that she is happy if she happy with this so i can go through this now i can speak very good now we are happy and we decide to meet soon this December and i apply my visit visa and i face a interview and i passed out the interview they ask ne questions in english that time i realised this language supports me in foreign language overall, everyone has a choice and thier own reason to learning a foreign language.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response touches on both views: it mentions learning for travel, work and study abroad, then gives a personal reason connected to communicating with a girlfriend. The visa-interview example also shows how English can be useful beyond simply travelling. However, the discussion is only partially developed. The view that language learning has broader benefits is not clearly explained with distinct reasons, and the opening claim about starting a business is not supported. Your own position appears mainly in the final sentence, rather than being stated and maintained clearly throughout. To strengthen the response, explain each side directly, add a relevant example for each, and state your opinion clearly in the introduction and conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a recognisable movement from reasons for learning a language to your personal experience and a concluding general statement. Some linking words, such as “But,” “furthermore” and “overall,” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, the response is presented as one long paragraph, and the ideas do not progress in a clear, controlled sequence. The extended account about your girlfriend, studies, visa and interview overwhelms the discussion of the two views. Connections between points are sometimes unclear, and “The lecture” does not fit the essay task. Use separate paragraphs for the introduction, each view, your opinion and the conclusion; keep each paragraph focused and use clear references to link ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “foreign language,” “abroad,” “studies,” “business” and “visa.” These words help communicate the general subject, and the personal example gives you opportunities to express specific ideas. However, the range is limited and several phrases are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “people's learn,” “for start their own business,” “loveones” and “passed out the interview.” Spelling and word-form errors, including “hilights” and “thier,” also reduce precision. Build a bank of accurate topic phrases and check collocations and spelling. For example, use “learn a language to improve communication” and “pass an interview” rather than translating phrases word for word.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to express reasons and consequences using clauses with “because,” “when” and “that’s why,” so it is not limited entirely to short simple sentences. However, sentence control is weak, particularly in the long sentence beginning “i also have a girlfriend,” which joins many separate ideas without clear punctuation. There are frequent problems with verb forms and agreement, as in “she born,” “everyone have” and “she forced me to learn”; articles and sentence boundaries are also often missing or unclear. These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise building shorter, accurate sentences first, then combine them with controlled subordinate clauses and check tense, agreement and punctuation.

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