Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this contemporary world, majority of individuals believe that one reason for learning a foreign language is essential for tourism or an employment while some people argue that they have another purpose of learning a foreign landuage.This essay will elucides bith the views of this situation along with its logical conclusion in upcoming paragraphs.

To commence with,there are temendous reasons behind why foreign language play vital role in individuals life.First and foremost, for emplyee who are working with another country's people in terms of communication where english is mendetory for them tp learn forign language.Moreover, nowadays businessmen invest their money in forign nations in order to expand new business around the world.Due to this they learn a foreign language for particular nation.For instamce, In India, especially Gujarati people learn mostly french language for employment purpose as well as travel where french is required.

On the other hand, another reason for individual is that they want to gain more knowledge in order to become a multi-linguistic person for their better career opportunities.Furthermore, in recent scenario, with the advancement of technology people are trend to learn english language for becoming independent finanically therefore they learn a foreign language rather than for work or a travel.

As per my perspectives, individual should learn various languages as a result they become more knowledgable in front of another people to represent their smartness.

In conclusion, government should encourage their native to learn both foreign language as well as their native language for taking good knowledge of particular region for better communication and developement of own nation in terms of becoming independent to fulfill their dreams and needs.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views: the second paragraph links language learning to employment, business and travel, while the third introduces learning for knowledge and career opportunities. Your opinion is also present, particularly in the statement that people should learn various languages. However, the discussion is only partial. The reasons beyond travel and work are not clearly distinguished or explained, and the claim about becoming “independent financially” is difficult to connect to learning English. The example about Gujarati people learning French is asserted rather than explained, so it does not strongly support the point. The conclusion shifts to what governments should do instead of clearly restating your own view. Develop each reason with a clear explanation or relevant example, and keep your position consistent throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, a statement of opinion and a conclusion. Connectors such as “To commence with,” “Moreover,” and “On the other hand” help signal the direction of the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the move from employment to business investment and then to the Gujarati example does not show precisely how each point relates to the main argument. Some linking phrases are also mechanical, and the final paragraph introduces government policy without a clear link to the opinion stated earlier. Use topic sentences that state each paragraph’s main idea, then connect each example directly to that idea and use referencing to make relationships between points clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary suited to the topic, including “employment,” “expand new business,” “multi-linguistic,” and “communication.” This shows an effort to discuss language learning beyond basic terms. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the response difficult to understand, such as “elucides,” “temendous,” “mendetory,” and “knowledgable.” Some combinations are also unnatural, including “another purpose of learning a foreign language” and “represent their smartness.” Choose more precise, natural expressions and check spelling carefully. For example, explain that language learning can broaden cultural understanding or improve career prospects, rather than relying on vague claims about knowledge and smartness.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses beginning with “where,” “in order to,” and “as a result.” This gives the response some structural variety. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors in agreement, articles, verb forms and sentence construction occur frequently. For example, “foreign language play vital role” lacks agreement and necessary articles, while “people are trend to learn” has an incorrect verb pattern. The opening sentence also runs several ideas together without clear punctuation, and some sentence fragments or incomplete constructions make relationships hard to follow. Practise building accurate sentences around one main clause, then add subordinate clauses only when their grammatical connection is clear.

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