Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The two pie charts illustrated about the percentages of British students at single university in England who were speak different language in addition to English, in between 2000 and 2010.
overall, the maximum proportion of other speak language was higher in both the years. Spanish dramatically showed fall as half of speakers left. Germany and another language speakers was steadily in this figure.
In 2000, no other language section consist higher proportion of the figure which was 30% and also in 2010 which was 35%. Germany showed steadily form of speakers in both the years with 10%. The speakers of two other languages and another language rose up to 5%.
On the other hand, Spanish dramatically dropped from 20% in 2000 to 10% in 2020. French language was also dropped from 2000 which was 15% and dropped to 10% in the 2010. In comparisons no other language speakers was lead in both the years and Spanish speakers dropped to half
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You identify several important features, including the largest category in both years, the rise in “No other language” from 30% to 35%, and the fall in Spanish from 20% to 10%. You also report the stable German figure and increases for the two-language and another-language groups. However, the overview is unclear: “the maximum proportion of other speak language was higher” does not clearly state the main pattern, and “Germany and another language speakers was steadily” conflicts with the later statement that another-language speakers rose. The year “2020” is incorrect; the chart compares 2000 and 2010. Make the overview precise and ensure each comparison is accurate and clearly explained.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response has an introduction, an overview, and two detail paragraphs, so there is some organisation and the reader can identify the broad comparison. However, progression between points is not consistently clear. The overview says that German and another-language figures were steady, while the details say the latter rose by five percentage points. The final sentence repeats that the no-other-language group led and Spanish halved, rather than adding a new comparison. Linking phrases such as “On the other hand” do not always express a clear contrast here. Group the increases, decreases, and unchanged figures systematically, and use references and connectors only where they clarify the relationship between data.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “dropped,” “rose,” and “speakers,” and the reader can generally understand which categories you mean. However, the range and control are limited, with several unnatural or imprecise phrases: “other speak language,” “showed fall,” “steadily in this figure,” and “rose up to 5%.” These make comparisons less clear and sometimes obscure whether you mean a percentage or a percentage-point change. “Germany” also names the country rather than the language category. Aim for accurate collocations and category labels, such as “the proportion speaking German remained unchanged” and “increased by five percentage points.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response attempts both simple statements and longer comparisons, but sentence structures are limited and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. For example, “who were speak” has an incorrect verb form, while “no other language section consist” has problems with tense and subject–verb agreement. In “Germany and another language speakers was steadily,” the subject and verb do not agree, and the sentence lacks a complete grammatical construction. Articles and prepositions are also often missing or awkward, as in “at single university” and “dropped from 2000.” Practise forming accurate past-tense comparisons and checking each sentence for a clear subject and correctly matched verb.
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