Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-07-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 7.0)
The pie charts illustrate the percentage of British students at a specific university in England who can speak different languages in addition to English between 2000 and 2010.
Overall, the proportion of students who only speak in English was higher in both years. The shares of Spanish and French speakers decreased in 2010, while the figures for French Only and two other languages speakers increased. However, German only speakers remained the same.
In 2000, there were 30% of British students who only speak in English. This was followed by Spanish and French speakers at 20% and 15% respectively. German only and two other languages speakers each stood at 10%. 15% of British students were able to speak in another language than English.
On the other hand, the percentage of students who only speak in English increased in 2010, reached at 35%. Meanwhile, in 2010, the figures for Spanish, French and German only each were at 10%. However, the proportions of Two other language and another language speakers increased from the previous year by 5%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
The response provides a clear overview and identifies the main trends, such as the increase in English-only speakers and the shifts in other language categories. You have successfully selected key features and made relevant comparisons between the two years. However, the report could be improved by ensuring all data points are accurately represented. For example, you mention 'two other languages' and 'another language' as separate categories, which may be a misinterpretation of the chart labels. Additionally, ensure that the data cited for 2010 is precise; for instance, stating that proportions increased by 5% is a good analytical step, but ensure the base figures are clearly linked to the chart data to avoid ambiguity.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.5
The essay is logically organized into four paragraphs: an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs focusing on the data for 2000 and 2010 respectively. This structure is effective and easy to follow. You use cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'In 2000', and 'On the other hand' to guide the reader through the information. To reach a higher band, ensure that the transition between sentences is smoother and avoid repetitive phrasing. The referencing is generally clear, though some of the category labels could be integrated more fluidly into the sentences to improve the flow of the analysis.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'illustrate', and 'respectively'. There is an attempt to use less common vocabulary, though some word choices are slightly awkward, such as 'reached at 35%' (should be 'reached 35%') and 'speak in another language than English' (should be 'speak a language other than English'). To improve, focus on more precise collocations and ensure that the terminology used to describe the chart categories is accurate and consistent throughout the response. Expanding your range of reporting verbs would also enhance the sophistication of your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical slips, such as 'only speak in English' (should be 'speak only English'), 'reached at 35%', and 'German only and two other languages speakers each stood at 10%'. These errors do not impede communication, but they do affect the overall accuracy. To improve, pay closer attention to preposition usage and subject-verb agreement. Incorporating a wider variety of complex structures, such as relative clauses or participle phrases, would help demonstrate greater control and flexibility in your writing.
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