Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-07-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
The pie charts compares the data of british students at one university in England who where able to speak other languages othe rthan English in 2000 and 2010. The scale is in percentages.
Overall, it is evident that majority of the students were not able to speak any other languages in both the years. The proportion of german speaking students were similar in 2000 and 2010.
To commence with, in 2000, students speaking Spanish language along with English accounted for 20%, whereas it was decreased to 10% in 2010. This trend was followed by French language. In 2000, proportion of French speaking students was about 15%, later in the year 2010 it declined by 5% to record a figure of 10%.
To add further, in 2000, students speaking only english language with no other language recorded a figure of 30%, while it increased by 5% in the upcoming year. Students speaking another language and two other languages along with english in the year 2000 accounted for 15% and 10% respectively. Whereas it surged by 5% in the year 2010. Finally, students speaking only german language other than english remained identical in the both consecutive years.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
You have successfully identified the main features and provided relevant comparisons between the two years. You covered all categories presented in the charts. However, there is a significant factual error in your analysis: you stated that the 'only English' category was 30% in 2000 and increased in 2010, whereas the chart shows it was 30% in 2000 and 35% in 2010. Additionally, your description of the 'two other languages' category is slightly confusing. To reach a higher band, ensure that your data reporting is precise and that you clearly distinguish between the categories provided in the legend.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0
The response is logically organized with a clear introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. You use cohesive devices such as 'To commence with', 'whereas', and 'Finally' to link your ideas. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical, and the referencing could be smoother. For instance, the phrase 'This trend was followed by French language' is slightly ambiguous in its connection to the previous sentence. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate different aspects of the data, which helps the reader follow the progression of your report.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'accounted for', 'surged', and 'identical'. There are some minor spelling errors, such as 'british' (should be capitalized) and 'othe rthan'. You also have some awkward phrasing, such as 'upcoming year' to refer to 2010, which is not contextually accurate. While your vocabulary is sufficient to convey the main points, incorporating more precise academic collocations would improve the quality of your writing and help you achieve a higher score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'pie charts compares' (subject-verb agreement), 'where able' (should be 'were able'), and 'in the both consecutive years' (incorrect article usage). While these errors are noticeable, they do not prevent the reader from understanding your intended meaning. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles. Increasing the variety of complex sentence structures while maintaining accuracy will also help elevate your score.
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