Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-07-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The rendered circular charts represent information about the percentiles of British pupils at the university in England who were capable to communicate in other languages in addition to English in year 2000 and 2010. The data has been calibrated into percentage.

Overall, it is crystal clear that the maximum percentage of British students were in no other language while the similar ratio was in German language.

At the fleeting glance, in English language in the year 2000 the ratio of British scholars was 30% which incline to 35% in later year. Moreover, in the french language percentile of students able to speaker another language was 15% in year 2000 while it considerably decline to 10 percent in 2010. The percentage of British pupils able to speak German language were similar in both 2000 and 2010 year which was 10%.

Moving furthur, the students know Spanish was 20 percent only in year 2000 while it did not surpass by 10% in later 10 years. Surprisingly, the ratio in another language in starting year was 15% which soon sharply climb to 20 percent in year 2010. Lastly, in year 2000 the ratio of pupils to speak two other language was 10 percent which was followed by 15% in later year 2010.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers all parts of the task and provides a clear overview of the data. You have successfully identified the main trends, such as the increase in students speaking 'another language' and the decline in French. However, the report contains some inaccuracies in data interpretation. For instance, you state that the percentage for 'no other language' was the maximum, but the chart shows 'no other language' is a category, and your description of the Spanish data ('did not surpass by 10%') is confusing and mathematically unclear. To improve, ensure your data points are precise and that your overview highlights the most significant changes rather than just listing details.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. You use some cohesive devices like 'Overall', 'At the fleeting glance', and 'Moving further' to connect ideas. However, some of these transitions are slightly unnatural or misused (e.g., 'At the fleeting glance' is not a standard IELTS phrase). Additionally, the progression of ideas within paragraphs is sometimes mechanical. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You have an adequate range of vocabulary to describe the charts, using terms like 'percentile', 'calibrated', and 'sharply climb'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'rendered circular charts', 'British scholars' (when referring to students), and 'incline to' (instead of 'increased to'). Some phrasing is also repetitive. To improve, work on using more precise academic vocabulary and collocations appropriate for describing statistical data, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuated', or 'remained stable'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement ('The percentage of British pupils... were') and preposition usage ('in year 2000' instead of 'in the year 2000'). There are also issues with word forms, such as 'able to speaker' instead of 'able to speak'. While these errors do not prevent communication, they occur frequently enough to limit the score. Focus on proofreading for basic tense consistency and article usage.

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