Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-07-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
the given pair of pie chart represents the change in percentage of british pupils at one university in england who speech other languages along with english . while pie chart depicts about the result of speaking other languages. overall its crystal clear that there was considerably change in english speech in 2000 and 2010.
At the fleeting glance the Spanish speech individuals gone double in fist and later year . followed by french language early it was 15 but later on it decline to 10. there was an other individuals those prefer two other languages which slightly rise 10 to 15.
Moreover ,another language speaking population grow with 5 percentage . there was german speech citizen remain constant .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully develop the task. While you have identified some main features, such as the increase in Spanish speakers and the decline in French, the analysis is superficial and lacks the necessary detail to reach a higher band. The overview is present but lacks clarity. To improve, ensure you provide a more comprehensive summary of the data, including specific comparisons between the two years, and ensure the response meets the length requirement to allow for full development of the main features.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into short paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes awkward, such as 'At the fleeting glance' and 'followed by french language early it was 15'. The referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, central focus that contributes to the overall summary.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, with several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'speech individuals' instead of 'speakers' and 'german speech citizen' instead of 'German speakers'. There is also a lack of precision in describing trends; for example, 'gone double' should be 'doubled'. To improve, focus on learning specific collocations for describing data, such as 'witnessed a rise', 'remained stable', or 'accounted for'. Expanding your range of vocabulary will help you describe the charts with greater accuracy and sophistication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('population grow'), incorrect verb forms ('it decline'), and missing articles. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and there is a lack of variety in complex structures. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, particularly tense consistency when describing past data. Proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb endings will also help improve the overall accuracy of your writing.
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