Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-07-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The rendered pair of pie charts depictd the imformation about ratio of british students that are proficient in other laguages despite of of english in two given years 2000 and 2010. The data has been calibrated into percentage.
Overall, it is crystal clear that most of the studdents were monoliguial while very less pupils spoke Spanish and French in later year.
At a fleeting glance, it is evident that most of the pupils spoke No other language than English with 30% in former year and 35% in later year. Following this spanish comes with 20% in year 2000 and Two other languages with same value in year 2010. French is ranging from 15% to 10% in this given decade.
Moreover, German and Another language was having a same ratio of 10% in first year and in last year German was again similar and Two other languages was experiencing a rise of 5%. French and Spanish was at a similar ratio of 10%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the charts, identifying the proportions for different language categories in 2000 and 2010. However, the analysis is somewhat inconsistent. For instance, the description of the 'No other language' category is inaccurate, as the charts show 30% and 35% respectively, but the comparison between years is slightly muddled. The summary of the data for 'Two other languages' and 'French' lacks precision, and the reporting of the data is occasionally confusing, making it difficult for the reader to follow the trends clearly. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are accurately transcribed and that comparisons are explicitly linked to the years provided.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader navigate the information. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'Following this spanish comes' and 'At a fleeting glance'. The progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed, particularly in the final paragraph where the grouping of data feels arbitrary. While there is an attempt to use linking words, they do not always create a smooth flow between sentences. Improving the variety and accuracy of transition signals will help create a more logical and cohesive response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary range is limited and contains several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'depictd', 'imformation', 'studdents', and 'monoliguial'. The phrasing is often repetitive, relying on simple structures to describe the data. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the frequent spelling errors and the misuse of terms like 'calibrated' (which is not appropriate in this context) hinder the overall quality. To improve, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a decline', and proofread carefully to eliminate basic spelling mistakes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('French and Spanish was', 'Two other languages was'), incorrect prepositions ('despite of of'), and awkward phrasing ('The rendered pair of pie charts depictd'). These errors are noticeable and occasionally cause the reader to pause, though they do not completely impede communication. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage, as the report should primarily use the past tense to describe the data from 2000 and 2010.
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