Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-07-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this chart, the chart shows the proportion of British students at one university of England. That were able to speak other language in addition of English. The chart have percentage of students speaking other language between 2000 and 2010. About 30% of students in 2000 speaks only English language. The percentage of German and two other language is also same. About 15% of students speaks French and also 15% speaks other language. Spanish is spoken at 20% in 2000. But the amount of percentage changes in 2010. The Spanish, German and French becomes same at 10%. The number of other languages have increased about 5% in 2010. French also take way to increase for 5% in 10 years. Only Spanish and French decreases while German remains the same.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully develop the response. While you have identified some main features, the analysis is superficial and lacks a clear overview of the trends. You have listed specific percentages but failed to synthesize the data effectively to highlight the most significant changes. Furthermore, there are inaccuracies in your interpretation of the data, such as stating that German remained the same when the chart indicates a change. To improve, ensure you provide a clear summary of the main trends and ensure all data points are accurately reflected.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is organized into a single paragraph, which makes it difficult to follow the progression of ideas. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences, resulting in a repetitive and mechanical flow. For example, you frequently start sentences with 'The' or 'About', which makes the writing feel disjointed. To achieve a higher score, you should use a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'In contrast', 'Furthermore', 'Consequently') and organize your response into clear paragraphs: an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs detailing the specific data points.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on basic terms like 'amount', 'percentage', and 'speaks'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'take way to increase' and 'amount of percentage changes', which are not natural English expressions. To improve, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a decline'. Expanding your range of verbs and nouns will help you describe the charts with greater accuracy and sophistication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'students... speaks', 'chart have'), incorrect preposition usage (e.g., 'in addition of'), and sentence fragments (e.g., 'That were able to speak...'). The range of structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. To improve, you need to practice subject-verb agreement and work on combining simple sentences into more complex structures using relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions. Proofreading for basic errors like pluralization and verb tense consistency is essential.

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