Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-07-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 7.0)
The pie charts illustrates the proportions of British students at a selected university in England who could speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
Overall, more percentage of students were able to speak just English in both years. In addition, French, Spanish and Germen were mentioned in these charts.
In 2000, Spanish was popular language which 20% of students could speak. The second highest percentage of students spoke French and another language that each one were 15%. 10% of students could speak German as much as two other languages.
The percentage of students who spoke just English increased 5%, in 2010. Also the amount of students who could speak tow other languages and another language climbed 5% and reached 15% and 20%, respectively. The percentage of students who could speak Spanish and French decreased substantially. On the other hand, The percentage of German stayed in same amount.
To sum up, the amount of students who could speak only English increased. The percentage of German had no change, Spanish and French decreased, another language and tow other languages climbed.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
You have successfully identified the main features of the charts and made relevant comparisons between the two years. You covered all categories (English only, two other languages, etc.) and provided data to support your claims. However, the response lacks a clear overview that synthesizes the trends effectively; the current overview is a bit fragmented. To reach a higher band, ensure that the 'main features' are highlighted more distinctly in the introduction or a dedicated overview paragraph, rather than just listing data points. The comparison between 2000 and 2010 is clear, but ensure that all data points are accurate, as there were some minor inconsistencies in the reporting of percentages.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0
The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of information. You use some cohesive devices like 'In addition', 'On the other hand', and 'To sum up' to link ideas. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally repetitive. For instance, starting multiple sentences with 'The percentage of...' makes the flow feel slightly monotonous. Improving the variety of cohesive devices and using more sophisticated referencing (e.g., 'this figure', 'the former', 'the latter') would enhance the overall flow and cohesion of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
You have an adequate range of vocabulary to describe the charts, using terms like 'proportions', 'increased', 'decreased', and 'substantially'. However, there are some spelling errors ('Germen', 'tow') and word choice issues ('more percentage' should be 'a higher percentage'). You rely on a somewhat limited set of verbs to describe trends. To improve, try to incorporate more varied synonyms for 'increase' and 'decrease' (e.g., 'rose', 'declined', 'fluctuated', 'remained stable') and ensure precise usage of nouns and adjectives to describe the data more naturally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement ('The pie charts illustrates') and incorrect phrasing ('each one were 15%'). Punctuation is generally functional, but there are some awkward phrasings that hinder the sophistication of the writing. To move up, focus on ensuring subject-verb agreement and refining your use of articles and prepositions. Increasing the variety of complex sentence structures, such as using relative clauses or participial phrases, would also help demonstrate better control over grammar.
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