Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
Overall, No other language accounted for the largest proportion among British students, whereas German and Two other languages were represented smallest share. Over the period, the proportions allocated to No other language, Two other languages and Another language increased substantially . By contrast, the shares of Spanish and French were declined slightly. The proportion of Spanish remained same throughout the period.
To begin with, No other language accounted for the largest proportion among British students at 30%, followed by Spanish at 20%, while Two other languages h
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is significantly under-length, failing to meet the 150-word minimum requirement. Because the response is incomplete and cuts off mid-sentence, it fails to provide a full overview or report all main features of the data. While an attempt was made to identify trends, the lack of completion prevents a full analysis of the data provided in the charts. To improve, you must ensure you complete the task by covering all categories and providing a full summary of the information presented, ensuring you meet the minimum word count to allow for a comprehensive response.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response shows some attempt at logical organization, using an introductory sentence and an 'Overall' paragraph. However, the abrupt ending severely disrupts the flow and coherence of the text. Cohesive devices are used in a basic manner, such as 'To begin with' and 'By contrast', but the overall structure is incomplete. To improve, focus on completing your thoughts and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear purpose, using a wider variety of linking words to connect your ideas more fluidly throughout the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task but remains quite repetitive and limited. Phrases like 'accounted for the largest proportion' and 'shares of' are used correctly, but there is a lack of variety in describing trends. For example, 'were declined' is grammatically incorrect and 'remained same' is imprecise. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary to describe data changes, such as 'experienced a marginal decrease' or 'remained constant', and ensure your word choices are precise and grammatically accurate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are several grammatical errors that hinder the clarity of the report. For instance, 'the shares of Spanish and French were declined slightly' is a passive voice error; it should be 'declined slightly'. Additionally, 'remained same' is missing an article ('the same'). The sentence structure is relatively simple, and the incomplete final sentence demonstrates a lack of control over sentence completion. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles, and practice writing complete, complex sentences to demonstrate a wider range of grammatical structures.
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