Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The chart presents information regarding language skill of the British students at one University who were speak many language along with english in 2000 and 2010.
Overall, it can be seen that, during 2000, the spanish and french were spoken more in comparision to 2010 at a University in England while, two other language, No other language's ratio has been increased in 2010 then 2000. No cheenge in the German speaker's ration during both year 2000 as well as 2010.
The spanish and french language were spoken by 20% and 15% British students respectively in 2000, which decreased in 2010 by 10% and 5% respectively. The German speaker remained same in both years 2000 and 2010 with 10% at a University in England.
The ration of only English speaker was increase by 35% in 2010, which was 30% in 2000 at a University in England. Two languages were also rose with 15% in 2010 in compersion 2000 with 10% among the brutish students. Bilingual students, who can speak another language with English also gained with 20% in 2010, which were 15% in 2000 at a University in England.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts, including the decline in French and Spanish and the stability of German. However, the reporting of data is often inaccurate or confusing. For example, you state that 'only English speaker was increase by 35% in 2010', whereas the chart shows an increase from 30% to 35%. Additionally, the phrase 'Two languages were also rose' is vague and lacks clarity regarding which languages are being referenced. While you attempt to make comparisons, the lack of precision in data interpretation prevents a higher score. To improve, ensure that every figure mentioned is accurately transcribed from the source material and clearly attributed to the correct category.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'in compersion 2000' and 'gained with 20%' are awkward and disrupt the flow of information. The logical progression between sentences is sometimes hindered by grammatical errors, making it difficult to follow the comparison between the two years. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'whereas', 'in contrast', 'consequently') and ensure that referencing (e.g., 'the former', 'the latter') is used correctly to avoid repetitive phrasing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally limited and repetitive, often relying on basic structures to describe trends. There are several instances of incorrect word choice and collocation, such as 'ratio' used instead of 'proportion' or 'percentage', and 'cheenge' (spelling error). Phrases like 'gained with 20%' are not standard academic English. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the basic meaning, it lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands. You should aim to use more specific verbs for trends, such as 'fluctuate', 'remain stable', or 'decline', and ensure accurate spelling throughout the text.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Two languages were also rose'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'who were speak many language'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic sentence construction limits the score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of passive voice for data reporting would significantly improve your accuracy.
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