Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The phpto describe the proportions of british student at one university in UK who were able to understand other language in axtra to english, in started 21 century and 2010. Overall in both years show the same ratio of German it's contain 10 percent people speak German to more than english in both years.
Firstly, i want to about who only speak and understand english because there are high ratio these type of student in both period of time. There are 30% percent in 2000 and and 35% in second period ther eare a minor difference in both times. Secondly, when people speak french there are 5% deffirence in both years. After that i talk about tow other languags
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully address the task. While you attempt to identify some data points, the report is incomplete and lacks a clear summary of the main features or significant trends. The analysis is fragmented, and you stop mid-sentence at the end of the text, meaning the task is not fully completed. To improve, ensure you provide a clear overview, select key data points for comparison, and complete your analysis within the required word limit.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. While there are attempts at paragraphing, the progression of ideas is unclear and the text ends abruptly. Cohesive devices are used in a very mechanical and repetitive way, such as 'Firstly' and 'Secondly', but these do not effectively link the information. The lack of a concluding summary or a cohesive flow makes the response difficult to follow. You should focus on grouping related data together and using a wider variety of linking words to connect your sentences and paragraphs logically.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. There are frequent spelling errors, such as 'phpto' for photo, 'axtra' for extra, 'deffirence' for difference, and 'tow' for two. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe the data accurately, relying on basic terms like 'people speak' rather than more precise academic language like 'proportions' or 'fluency'. To improve, you should practice using topic-specific vocabulary related to charts and statistics, and pay closer attention to spelling and word choice.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the charts... show' vs 'the phpto describe'), incorrect article usage, and awkward sentence construction (e.g., 'i want to about who only speak'). The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with errors. You need to focus on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of tenses to describe data in the past and present.
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