Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The provided pie illustrates the information regarding the ratio of British learners in specific university in England those were able to talk in other languages together with english during the year 2000 and 2010.
Overall, it is apparent that the maximum percentage of pupils are able to speak only in english in both given years. However, the least proportion of educatives talk in Spanish, French and German only in second year.
To begin with, it can be lucid that difference between educants those were speak only Spanish and French in 2000 was 5%. The percentage of students who was able to talk no other language was doubled to the who was speak another language in first given year which was 30 percent. The students who are talk only in german and two other languages was 10% respectively.
Turning towards remaining information, it can be seen that the learners speak only in Spanish, French and German in 2010 was almost similar which was 10 percentam. The ratio of educaties who are able to talk two more languages was less than the students who speak only in English in 2010 which was 15. The learners able to talk in another language was 20 percentile.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the task by summarizing the main features of the charts. However, the analysis is hampered by inaccuracies in reporting the data. For instance, the claim that the difference between Spanish and French speakers in 2000 was 5% is not clearly supported by the visual data, and the description of the 2010 data is confusing. The overview is present but lacks clarity. To improve, you should focus on accurately identifying the most significant trends, such as the decline in 'only English' speakers and the rise in those speaking two or more languages, rather than listing individual percentages without clear comparative context.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused, such as 'To begin with' and 'Turning towards remaining information'. Some sentences lack logical flow, making it difficult to follow the comparison between the two years. Referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly when referring to 'the second year' or 'the first given year'. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words will help create a smoother progression of ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and contains several non-standard or invented terms, such as 'educatives', 'educants', and 'percentam'. These errors occasionally impede communication. While you attempt to use terms like 'proportion' and 'ratio', the misuse of basic terminology prevents a higher score. You should focus on using standard academic vocabulary correctly and avoid creating new words. Expanding your range of synonyms for 'increase', 'decrease', and 'percentage' would also be beneficial.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('the maximum percentage of pupils are', 'students who was able') and awkward phrasing ('those were speak'). The sentence structures are generally simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors that affect clarity. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring that your verb tenses are consistent when describing past data. Proofreading for basic errors like missing articles and incorrect pluralization will significantly improve your accuracy.
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