Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The relative changes in the ability to speak non-native languages of British students in a tertiary organization during 2000 to 2010 is illustrated in the pie charts.
Overall, mixed trend is seen across the languages they speak. Whereas, only French, two other languages speakers increased, the speakers of French , Spanish decreased in the mentioned decade.
The increased trends were 5% in both case that is 15% to 20% & 10% to 15% for the only French and two other languages respectively. Besides, the speakers of no other language except English were also increased from 30% to 35%.
The percentage of students able to speak German were same 10%. But the students able to speak French, Spanish were decreased from 15% to 10% and 20 to 10% respectively. However, the language in which students were able to speak have reflected a linear relationship either increased or decreased.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While you have identified the main features and provided some comparisons, the analysis is somewhat superficial. You correctly highlight the trends for French and Spanish, but the overall summary lacks a cohesive synthesis of the data. Furthermore, there are inaccuracies in your reporting; for example, you state that 'only French' increased, but the data shows 'two other languages' also increased. The failure to reach the minimum length means the task is not fully addressed, leading to a lower band score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression is hindered by awkward phrasing and limited use of cohesive devices. Transitions like 'Whereas' and 'Besides' are used, but they often feel mechanical or are placed incorrectly, such as starting a sentence with 'Whereas' followed by a comma. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the two years. Improving the flow between sentences and using a wider variety of linking words would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band. You rely on basic terms like 'increased' and 'decreased' repeatedly. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'tertiary organization' instead of 'university' or 'higher education institution'. The phrase 'in both case' contains a grammatical error, and 'linear relationship' is used incorrectly in this context. To improve, focus on using more sophisticated synonyms for trends and ensuring that your word choices are contextually appropriate for describing statistical data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. For instance, 'the speakers of French , Spanish decreased' lacks a conjunction, and 'the language in which students were able to speak have reflected' contains a subject-verb agreement error. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and the ampersand symbol, which should be avoided in formal academic writing. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents a higher score.
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