Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
the pie diagram illiustrate the increasing the number of speaking other language than English in England
overall, in 2000 the 30% of the British student speak non other language it is the huge number of students which not speaking other language if we see the pie chart but when we look the number of French language which student speaks its 20% and its growing number of students and may be in future to increase more and the other side we see French thebiritsh student also speaking leaning the French language for understanding
and we look into the second pie graph the no other language student is increase most of people not learning the new language but Spanish became half of language for learning and even French less people now leasrning this language
overall
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you attempt to describe the data, the summary is incomplete and lacks a clear overview of the main trends. You mention specific percentages like '30%' and '20%', but the analysis is fragmented and fails to make meaningful comparisons between the two years. The information is presented in a disorganized manner, and the lack of sufficient detail means the task is only partially addressed. To improve, ensure you provide a clear overview of the main changes and support your points with accurate data from the charts while meeting the length requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks logical organization and progression. There is no clear paragraph structure, and the use of cohesive devices is almost non-existent, making the text difficult to follow. Phrases like 'and we look into' and 'on the other side' are used mechanically and do not effectively link ideas. The transition between the two pie charts is abrupt, and the overall flow is hindered by the lack of proper sentence structure and paragraphing. To improve, use clear topic sentences for each paragraph and employ a wider range of linking words such as 'in contrast', 'furthermore', or 'consequently' to connect your ideas logically.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, which restricts your ability to convey information precisely. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'no other language student is increase' and 'leasrning'. You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle to use academic language appropriate for a report. Many phrases are awkward, such as 'huge number of students which not speaking other language'. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'significant increase', and pay closer attention to spelling and word forms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'the pie diagram illiustrate' and 'the 30% of the British student speak'. Sentence structures are often incomplete or run-on, and there is a lack of control over basic punctuation and capitalization. The attempt at complex sentences is unsuccessful due to these persistent errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and practice using articles and prepositions correctly. Proofreading for basic errors is essential.
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