Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The charts illustrate the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak languages other than English in 2000 and 2010.
Overall, the proportion of student who English over the ten-year period, while the percentages of the who could speak another language generally increased. Spanish was the most widely spoken additional language in both years.
In 2000, 30% of students spoke on English, compared with 35% in 2010? In contrast, the proportion who could speak Spanish rose from 30% to 35%. the percentage of students speaking French remained unchanged at 15% in both years.
Meanwhile , the propotion
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, as it is only 103 words long. This significantly impacts the ability to fully address the task. While the introduction and overview are present, the body paragraphs are incomplete and cut off abruptly. The data reporting is insufficient, and the analysis of the trends is not fully developed due to the unfinished nature of the text. To improve, you must ensure you provide a complete summary of all data points and comparisons, ensuring the response reaches the required length to allow for a full demonstration of your writing ability.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response shows some attempt at logical organization with an introduction, overview, and body paragraph structure. However, the text is incomplete, which disrupts the overall progression of ideas. Cohesive devices like 'In contrast' and 'Meanwhile' are used, but the abrupt ending prevents a coherent conclusion or a fully developed argument. Paragraphing is attempted, but the final paragraph is left unfinished, which negatively affects the flow and readability of the response. To improve, focus on completing your thoughts within each paragraph and ensuring that your ideas transition smoothly from one point to the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task, with terms like 'proportions', 'widely spoken', and 'remained unchanged' being appropriate for a data description task. However, there are errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'propotion' and 'the who could speak'. The range of vocabulary is limited by the brevity of the response. To achieve a higher band, you should aim to incorporate a wider variety of precise academic vocabulary and ensure that your spelling and word forms are accurate throughout the text.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex sentence structures. However, there are several grammatical errors that impede clarity, such as 'the proportion of student who English' (missing verb) and 'the percentages of the who could speak'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with a question mark used incorrectly in the middle of a sentence. The grammatical control is inconsistent, and the errors are frequent enough to cause some difficulty for the reader. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and sentence completeness will help improve your score in this area.
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