Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The two charts gives the proportions of British students who could express themselves in other languages apart from English in an exceptional University in England, in two distinct years that is 2000 and 2010.
Overall, In comparison, there's an upward trend in learners expressing themselves using no other language in 2010 to 2000. Whereas , two other languages recorded a downward trend in 2010 as compared to the year 2000.
Initially, No other language became more popular thus had around 30% percent of students population in 2000 which climbed up to about 35% in 2010.In addition to that, Two other languages was the second which showed significant increase of 5% of the population, previously from 10% in 2000.
On the other hand, German remained constant throughout the period. It had 10% in both years. Spanish and french initially were tallied separately in 2010 each had 20% and 15% respectively. This was way above the rest except No other languages which came first. However, in 2010,
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the main features, but it contains significant inaccuracies in data interpretation. For example, you state that 'No other language' climbed to 35% in 2010, whereas the chart indicates a different figure. Furthermore, the description of 'Two other languages' is confusing, and the final sentence is incomplete, leaving the summary unfinished. While you identify some trends, the failure to complete the report and the misreading of the data prevent a higher score. To improve, ensure you carefully verify the data points against the charts and provide a complete, coherent summary that covers all categories presented.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow of information is hindered by logical gaps and mechanical transitions. Phrases like 'Initially' and 'On the other hand' are used, but they do not always connect the ideas effectively. The referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly when discussing the categories. The most significant issue is the lack of a concluding sentence or a fully developed final paragraph, as the text ends abruptly. To improve, focus on using cohesive devices that link sentences more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, completed point before moving to the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportions', 'upward trend', and 'remained constant'. However, there are errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'exceptional University' (likely meant 'a specific university') and 'tallied separately'. Some phrasing is repetitive, and the lack of precision in describing the data categories limits your score. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensure that your word choices accurately reflect the data being described without ambiguity.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Subject-verb agreement issues are common, such as 'The two charts gives' and 'Two other languages was'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas and periods. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to distract the reader. To improve, proofread your work specifically for subject-verb agreement and ensure that your punctuation follows standard conventions, particularly regarding spacing and sentence boundaries.
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