Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The two pie chart compares the percentages of British university students who were speak other languages namely French, German, Spanish etc, between 2000 an 2010.
Overall, english language were largest share im 2000 which, increased slightly in 2010. By contrast, German and two other languages was in the same proportoin before 2000, where the German remained same and two other languages increased marginally in 2010.
Firstly, English language accounted for largest share over both years which was 30 and 35% respectively. The other languages was contributed for 15% in 2000 which boosted to 20% in 2010 while French language fell from 15% to 10% in 2000 and 2010 respectively. A same pattern was seen in tha case of spanish which decreased from 20% to 10% among both years.
For instance, the two other languages which showed 10% in 2000 are sharply widened to 15% in 2010.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the task by identifying main features and making comparisons. However, the report is under the 150-word minimum, which negatively impacts the score. While the overview is present, some data points are inaccurate or confusingly presented, such as the claim that French fell from 15% to 10% in 2000 and 2010 respectively, which is unclear. The description of the data is somewhat repetitive and lacks the precision required for a higher band. To improve, ensure all data points are accurately transcribed and that the summary clearly highlights the most significant trends rather than listing every figure.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'For instance' used to introduce a summary point rather than an example. Referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly when discussing 'the two other languages,' which creates confusion. The progression of ideas is present but feels disjointed due to the awkward phrasing and repetitive sentence structures. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer back to their antecedents would significantly enhance the flow of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'increased,' 'decreased,' and 'share.' There are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'was contributed for' and 'sharply widened.' The spelling of 'proportoin' and 'spanish' (should be capitalized) also detracts from the quality. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated,' 'remained stable,' or 'accounted for a significant proportion,' and ensure that you use these terms in their correct grammatical context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('English language were largest,' 'other languages was contributed'), incorrect verb tenses, and missing articles. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at complex sentences often result in errors, such as 'The two pie chart compares...' instead of 'The two pie charts compare.' To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles. Proofreading for these fundamental errors will help ensure that your meaning is conveyed accurately to the reader.
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