Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The charts shows the information about the proportions of British students at one university in England were able to speak other languages in addition to English in 2000 and 2010.
Overall, it can be seen that in 2000, 30% of no other languages is highest to able to speak British students and 20% to 15% of Spanish, French and another languages able to speak. 10% of German and two other languages are very low to able speak British students.
In addition, 35% of no other languages are able to speak British students in 2010. 20% to 15% of another and two another languages
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully address the task. The summary is incomplete, as it cuts off mid-sentence and fails to provide a comprehensive overview of the data. While some main features are identified, such as the proportions for 'no other languages', the lack of development and the unfinished nature of the report mean that the task is only partially addressed. To improve, you must ensure you complete the summary by covering all categories and providing a clear comparison between the two years.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response lacks a clear logical progression. While there is an attempt at an introduction and an 'overall' statement, the body paragraphs are fragmented and incomplete. Cohesive devices are largely absent or used incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'to able to speak'. The text does not flow well, and the abrupt ending makes it difficult for the reader to follow the information. To improve, focus on using transition signals like 'in contrast', 'furthermore', or 'while' to connect your ideas and ensure each paragraph has a clear focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'to able to speak' are used incorrectly throughout the text, indicating a lack of control over basic collocations. There is little attempt to use a range of vocabulary to describe trends or proportions (e.g., 'increased', 'decreased', 'remained stable'). The phrasing is often awkward, making the meaning unclear at times. You should aim to learn specific vocabulary for describing charts, such as 'proportion', 'percentage', 'fluctuated', and 'accounted for', to improve your precision and range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('The charts shows'), incorrect word order ('30% of no other languages is highest to able to speak'), and incomplete sentence structures. The range of structures is very limited, relying on simple, often faulty, sentences. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that your word order follows standard English patterns.
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