Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pie charts illustrates the number of the British students at University in England who were eligible to speak other languages instead of English between 2000 and 2010
Overall,it is evident that British student recorded the number highest spoken language spanish,while proportion of other languages are marginally low .
Turning to details ,the British students recorded the figure of highest spoken Spanish language in the England 2000 ,while spanish stood at 15%in 2020.next ,french accounted for the proportion of 15%in 2000, meanwhile figure of french experienced moderate decline in 2010.thereafter figure of the Germany have remained stable in both years.
Probing further, french recorded the proportion of 15% in both years ,by contrast 30%of students do not speak other language,the figure of other language witnessed graduall rose in 2010.subsequently two other languages recorded the proportion of 10 and 15 .another language recorded the proportion of
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While you have attempted to identify some main features, the data interpretation is inconsistent and contains factual inaccuracies (e.g., mentioning 2020 when the charts are for 2000 and 2010). The summary is incomplete, as the final sentence is cut off, and the overview is somewhat confusing. To improve, ensure you accurately transcribe data from the charts, provide a clear and concise overview of the main trends, and ensure the response is of sufficient length to fully develop your points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a clear logical progression. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the transitions between ideas are often mechanical or confusing, such as the abrupt shift in 'Turning to details' and 'Probing further'. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes inaccurate, which makes the flow of information disjointed. The final sentence is incomplete, which further disrupts the coherence of the response. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear focus would significantly enhance the readability and structure of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is somewhat repetitive and limited, relying on basic structures to describe the data. Phrases like 'recorded the figure of' and 'proportion of' are used repeatedly, which limits the range. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'graduall rose' and 'instead of English' (where 'in addition to' would be more accurate). To achieve a higher band, you should aim to use a wider variety of verbs and nouns to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained constant', or 'a significant increase'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('The pie charts illustrates'), article usage ('the England'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper punctuation, which hinders clarity. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty or incorrectly punctuated. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and proofreading for common errors like missing articles or incorrect pluralization. Consistent practice with simple, error-free sentences is a good starting point.
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