Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pie charts illustrate the percentage of British learners at one education center in England who were able to spoke different languages other than English over the 10 years periods.
Overall, it is clear that learners able to spoke no other language the highest proportion both the years. In addition, Spanish, French languages were learners choose spoke least language, while no other, another, two other languages students able to spoke most in 2010 and German language student prefer remain stable.
In details, Spanish language student able to spoke other than English at 20% in 2000 after that that language significant decrease at 10% in 2010. British learners spoke French in 15% by 2000 over the 10 years period decline numbers at 10% in 2000. German language spoke instead of English at 10% in the both year.
However, learners were able to speak no other language learners prefer to English language at 30% in 2000 which was the highest percentage of figure, after the 10 year these proportions increased in 35%. Finally, another and two other languages learner spoke rather than English in 15% and 10% in 2000 respectively, while students number was rise at 20% and 15% in
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the charts, identifying the trends for different languages. However, the analysis is hampered by significant inaccuracies in reporting the data. For example, you state that French declined to 10% in 2000, which is logically inconsistent with the timeline. Furthermore, the summary of the data is often confusing, such as the claim that 'no other' language was the highest proportion, which is accurate, but the subsequent description of other categories is difficult to follow due to poor data representation. To improve, ensure that your data points are accurately transcribed from the charts and that your comparisons are clearly linked to the specific years provided.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is frequently interrupted by grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Overall', 'In addition', and 'However', their effectiveness is limited by the surrounding sentence structure. The progression of ideas is often disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between 2000 and 2010. To improve, focus on using transition words more naturally and ensure that each sentence clearly relates to the previous one to build a cohesive argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic structures. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'learners choose spoke least language' and 'student prefer remain stable'. These errors occasionally make the meaning unclear. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained constant', or 'accounted for'. Additionally, work on using verbs and nouns correctly in context rather than repeating the same simple phrases throughout the text.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
Grammar is the weakest area of this response. There are persistent errors in verb tense and form, such as 'able to spoke' (should be 'able to speak') and 'students number was rise' (should be 'the number of students rose'). Sentence structures are often fragmented or incorrectly constructed, which frequently impedes communication. There is very little evidence of complex sentence structures, and even simple sentences contain errors. You need to focus on basic subject-verb agreement and the correct use of infinitives and past tense forms to improve your clarity and accuracy.
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