Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given circular depicts the information about percentage students able to speak languages other than English in university of England . From 2000 to 2010. The data is represented in percentage.

Overall' in the chart most of peoples speaking no other language in the university of england .while less people prefer to speak two other language in the given years

To begin with, the british students speaks various langauages in university of england in 2000.The top seat was notched by no other language with 30 %and follwed by another language with 15%.The former figured was increased with 5% in 2010 and latter figure was also decreased with 5% in same year. while the data of another language and two other language was howered around 10% in both years

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the development of the task. While you have identified some key features, the analysis is superficial and lacks the necessary detail to fully address the prompt. The summary of the data is incomplete, and the comparisons between the two years are not fully explored. To improve, ensure you provide a more comprehensive overview of all categories presented in the charts and extend your analysis by comparing the proportions more thoroughly. The current length prevents a full development of the main features.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical, such as 'To begin with' and 'The former figured'. Some sentences feel disconnected, making the overall flow somewhat disjointed. To improve, focus on using a wider range of linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more naturally. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus and that the transition between the overview and the body paragraphs is smoother. Improving the logical flow will help the reader follow your analysis more easily.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, which limits your ability to describe the data precisely. Phrases like 'top seat was notched by' are awkward and unnatural in this context. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'langauages' and 'howered', and grammatical issues with word choice, such as 'circular' instead of 'pie charts'. To achieve a higher score, try to use more varied and precise vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuated', 'increased by', or 'remained stable'. Expanding your range of academic vocabulary will significantly enhance the quality of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('british students speaks'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper punctuation, which hinders clarity. For example, 'The former figured was increased with 5%' is grammatically incorrect. You should focus on mastering basic sentence structures before attempting more complex ones. Pay close attention to verb tenses and ensure that your sentences are complete and correctly punctuated. Regular practice with proofreading your work for these common errors will help you improve your grammatical accuracy.

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