Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The illustrate charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English,in 2000 and 2010.
There were 10 percent students how was able to speak two other languages, in addition 20 percent students how just speak Spanish, and also there were 30 percent students how just speak English not other languages.The 15 percent were able to speak French.
On the other chart there were 15 percent students how can speak two other languages, and also 10 percent were can speak only Spanish, moreover 10 percent were able to speak German language. And there were 35 percent students how were not able to speak any other language except English.And also there were 10 percents students how can speak french also.
In both charts show the percentage of students in England university how were able to speak also other language with English.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task by describing the data from the two charts. However, the information is presented in a fragmented and disorganized manner. While some data points are mentioned, there is no clear overview or summary of the main trends, which is a requirement for Task 1. The comparison between the two years is weak and lacks analytical depth. Several figures are listed without context, and the overall structure fails to highlight the significant changes or similarities between 2000 and 2010. To improve, you should group related data and provide a clear summary statement that captures the overall shift in language proficiency over the decade.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response lacks logical progression. The information is presented as a list of statistics rather than a cohesive report. Paragraphing is absent, making the text difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are used repetitively and often incorrectly, such as the frequent use of 'and also' and 'how' (used instead of 'who'). There is no clear transition between the description of the 2000 data and the 2010 data. To improve, you should organize your response into distinct paragraphs—an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs—and use a wider variety of linking words to connect your ideas logically.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on basic phrases like 'there were' and 'students how'. There are frequent errors in word choice and form, such as 'The illustrate charts' (should be 'The illustrated charts') and '10 percents' (should be '10 percent'). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends or comparisons effectively. To reach a higher band, you need to use more precise language to describe data, such as 'proportion', 'percentage', 'fluctuated', 'increased', or 'remained stable', and avoid repeating the same sentence structures throughout the response.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede clarity. There are significant issues with relative clauses (e.g., 'students how was able to speak'), subject-verb agreement, and tense consistency. The sentence structures are simple and often incorrectly constructed, such as '10 percent were can speak only Spanish'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures, ensuring correct verb forms, and practicing the use of relative pronouns like 'who' or 'which' instead of 'how'.
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