Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The charts illustrate the proportions of British learns at one university in England who were able to speak other language in addition to English from 2000 to 2010. In 2000, the British pupils able to speak other language. 30% learns speaks no other language therefore, 20% learns speak Spanish. In addition the learns speaks German and two other language are approximately same. the British people speak french or another language remained same. By 2010, the British people speak Spanish or French at 10% and declined. However, the German are equally same in 2000 or 2010.The two other language is rose at 5% at the same time French also high at 5 % during the period. Overall, the charts shows the percentage of 2000 or 2010, The British speaks Spanish 20% in 2000 and declined at 10%. the British speaks other languages in up and high in different two period.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While you have attempted to identify some data points, the reporting is often inaccurate or confusing (e.g., stating 'German are equally same' when the charts show a clear change). You have failed to provide a clear overview of the main trends, and the data selection is inconsistent. To improve, ensure you accurately transcribe the figures from the charts and group them logically to highlight the most significant changes or similarities between 2000 and 2010. The current report lacks the necessary analytical depth required for an Academic Task 1 response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The essay lacks a logical structure. While there are paragraph breaks, the progression of ideas is disjointed and difficult to follow. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and often misused, such as the repetitive and awkward use of 'the learns' and 'the British people'. The lack of clear linking words between sentences makes the text feel like a list of isolated, poorly constructed observations rather than a cohesive summary. You need to use a wider range of linking phrases (e.g., 'In contrast', 'Furthermore', 'Conversely') to help the reader navigate your report more effectively.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. You frequently use incorrect terminology, such as 'learns' instead of 'students' or 'learners', and 'equally same', which is redundant and non-standard. There is no evidence of an attempt to use a range of vocabulary to describe trends (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'witnessed a decline'). Many sentences are difficult to understand due to poor word choice and grammatical errors. To improve, focus on learning specific collocations for describing data, such as 'a significant decrease', 'remained constant', or 'a slight rise'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the learns speaks', 'the two other language is rose'), incorrect verb tenses, and missing articles. Sentence structures are simple and often fragmented, lacking the complexity required for higher bands. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several run-on sentences and misused capital letters. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that you are using the correct tense when describing past data.

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