Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The proportions of British student at one university in England he able to speak in different languages in addition to England in 2000 to 2010. I discussed about the statement in the below paragraph .
The student speak French 15%and German languages is 10 %and Spanish language is 20% and another two languages is 10% and an other languages is 15% and last no other languages is 30% speak in 2000 .
In 2010 the boy speak the languages French is 10%, German language is 10% ,Spanish is 10%, another languages is 20% and two other language is 15%and last no other languages is 35% speak in 2010.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. The content is limited to a basic listing of data points without any attempt to identify key trends, make meaningful comparisons, or provide an overview of the data. The response lacks an analytical approach, merely repeating the figures provided in the charts rather than summarizing the information as requested. To improve, you must provide an overview of the main trends and group the data logically to highlight significant changes between 2000 and 2010.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response is organized into three short paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is mechanical and repetitive. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link the sentences or the two years being compared. The structure is essentially a list of data points rather than a coherent report. The referencing is unclear, and the transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is abrupt. To improve, use linking words such as 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'while' to connect your observations and create a logical flow between the years.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive, relying heavily on the words provided in the prompt. There is no attempt to use a range of vocabulary to describe trends or proportions. Phrases like 'the boy speak' are inappropriate for an academic report, as the data refers to students in general. The lack of variety in reporting verbs and nouns makes the text monotonous. To improve, incorporate a wider range of academic vocabulary, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a decline'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The student speak'), incorrect word order, and missing articles. The sentence structures are very simple and repetitive, lacking the complexity required for an academic task. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with spaces missing before and after percentages. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and practicing the use of complex sentence structures to describe data trends accurately.
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