Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The diagram illustrates the ratio of British learners at other universities in England who can communicate with other dialects in addition to English from 2000 to 2010.
Overall, British learners who can communicate with other dialects in 2000 with the highest percentage is from the students who cannot speak other languages 30% then the last percentage is from the students who can talk German language and the other is students who can speak another languages has 10%. Meanwhile, in 2010 the highest scores from the students who can speak other languages are the same people who can't speak other languages The total is 35%. then the least is still from Germany which has 10% with the same score of Spain and France.
In detail, In 2000 the other languages had the highest percentage of 30% and second is Spanish only, then the third one is French with a tie up of another languages 15%, while the last is from two other languages with the same percentage of 10% the German and the students who can converse another languages.
In 2010, The highest still the same students who dont talk another language and decreased slowly to 35%, then the three countries who have the same scores have 10% were French, Spanish, and German.
while the last scores went to two other languages and another language which has 20-15%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the data but struggles with accuracy and clarity. The description of the data is often contradictory or confusing; for example, you state that in 2010 the percentage for those who cannot speak other languages 'decreased slowly to 35%', yet the chart shows it increased from 30% to 35%. Furthermore, the reporting of the language categories is inconsistent, making it difficult for the reader to follow the trends. While you have identified the main features, the lack of precision in interpreting the figures and the failure to clearly distinguish between the two years significantly impacts the quality of the report.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'then' and 'the last is from'. Referencing is also problematic; for instance, the phrase 'the same people who can't speak other languages' is unclear. The transition between the overview and the detailed body paragraphs is abrupt, and the internal structure of the sentences often lacks the necessary flow to guide the reader through the data effectively.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'highest', 'lowest', and 'percentage'. There are significant issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'communicate with other dialects' (instead of 'speak other languages') and 'tie up of another languages'. The phrasing is often unnatural, which hinders the clarity of the report. To improve, you should focus on using more precise terminology for describing trends, such as 'accounted for', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a decline'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the highest still the same students'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward sentence construction. Complex sentence structures are attempted but are often faulty, leading to confusion. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and capitalization. A focus on basic sentence structure and ensuring that subjects and verbs agree would significantly improve the readability of your writing.
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