Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The table and pie charts illustrates the figures of tourists visit in Ashdown Museum during a particular year before renovation and after their visits and displays their surveys results taken from visitors about their satisfaction level and compared with both of periods.
Overall, the notable fact is that the visitors are increases after renovation also their survey results are far better than as compared with before. therefore, percent of no response remained same in both period.
Firstly, in table the total figures before transformation was 74,000 visitors during the same period of time. Therefore, it is rosed by 18,000 more tourists. Also in the very satisfied survey result in past it were 15% later more than half of their very satisfied people get rise. For more in satisfied people is increased by 10% as compared with past.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0
The response fails to address the actual task provided, which concerns British students' language skills. Instead, it describes a completely different topic regarding museum visitor satisfaction. Furthermore, the response is under the 150-word minimum requirement, which significantly impacts the score. Because the content is entirely off-topic, it does not provide a summary of the required data, failing to report main features or make relevant comparisons. Consequently, the task achievement is severely compromised.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, and there is an attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'Firstly', and 'Therefore'. However, the logical progression is hindered by the fact that the content is irrelevant to the prompt. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the mechanical use of transition words does not compensate for the lack of a coherent argument related to the actual data provided in the prompt.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'figures of tourists visit' instead of 'visitor numbers' and 'rosed' instead of 'rose'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to discuss the data with any precision. While the meaning is generally understandable, the lack of appropriate terminology for describing charts and trends limits the score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede clarity. Examples include 'The table and pie charts illustrates' (subject-verb agreement error), 'visitors are increases' (incorrect verb form), and 'as compared with before' (awkward phrasing). There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the control over basic grammar is inconsistent. The errors are frequent and often distract the reader from the intended meaning.
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