Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The provided pie charts illustrate the proportion of British students from the university who speak different languages in addition English in the given time period of 10 years.

Overall, the proportion of British students who spoken English language was highest. While ,the least preference given to German language.

Having a quick glance, In 2000, Where the no other language which was highly spoken by native students at 35% ,followed by both another language and French was similar. Interestingly, Spanish language noted at 20% by Britishers and two other and German language was reported for 10%.

Moving towards the rest of the information In 2020, no other language spoken by British students from university at 35%. In contrast , Spanish, French and German was represented at 10%.15% British students spoken French only and 20% people who were able to speak French and two other language.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While you have attempted to identify main features, the reporting is inconsistent and contains factual inaccuracies regarding the data provided in the charts. For instance, you mention '2020' instead of '2010', and the descriptions of the percentages are confusing and do not accurately reflect the visual data. To improve, ensure you carefully transcribe the data and provide a clear, accurate summary of the trends. The overview is present but lacks the necessary precision to fully address the task requirements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the flow of information is disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused, such as 'Having a quick glance' and 'Moving towards the rest of the information', which do not transition smoothly between ideas. Referencing is also unclear; for example, it is difficult to follow which language corresponds to which percentage due to the lack of clear signposting. To improve, focus on using logical connectors that link sentences and paragraphs more naturally, and ensure that each sentence clearly relates to the previous one.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic structures to describe the data. There are noticeable errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'Britishers' (which is informal and often considered inappropriate in academic writing) and 'noted at 20% by Britishers'. The phrasing 'no other language which was highly spoken' is awkward. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'accounted for', and avoid informal terminology.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede communication. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('Spanish, French and German was represented'), incorrect verb tenses ('who spoken'), and missing articles or prepositions ('in addition English'). The sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles, before attempting more complex grammatical structures.

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