Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

This chart illustrates proportion of british students at one university in england who were able to speak other language in additon to english in 2010 and 2020

In 2000, many other countries are able to speak languages. Spanish are able to speak only 20% of english language and french have only 15% of ratio to speak their language ,Germany have only 10% of ratio of british student to speak their language. On the other hand, 15% of british student who speak

Other language and 10% of british student who speak two other language

In 2010,, franch and spanish british student have 10% proportion who are able to speak no other language.20% proportion of british student who speak another language.On the other hand,15% proportion of british student who speak two other language and germany have 10% of proportion of british student who are able to speak german only .

In conclusion, all the countries have a different population in 2000 and 2010

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to accurately report the data provided in the charts. The student misinterprets the categories, confusing the languages spoken with the countries themselves (e.g., 'Spanish are able to speak only 20%'). Furthermore, the data points cited are often inaccurate or unclear, and the comparison between the two years is poorly handled. The conclusion is generic and does not summarize the main trends or significant changes, such as the increase in students speaking two other languages. The response lacks a clear overview of the main features, which is a requirement for Band 6 and above.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is illogical and confusing. Cohesive devices are used in a very mechanical and often incorrect way, such as the repetitive use of 'On the other hand' and 'proportion of'. The referencing is unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow which data points belong to which year or category. The lack of logical flow between sentences and the disjointed nature of the information significantly hinder the overall coherence of the report.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is limited and frequently inaccurate. There are significant issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'ratio to speak their language' and 'franch and spanish british student'. The student struggles to use appropriate terminology for describing charts, such as 'proportions' or 'percentages', often misapplying these terms. The repetition of basic phrases and the inability to use precise language to describe the data trends prevent the response from reaching a higher band score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'many other countries are able to speak'), incorrect capitalization (e.g., 'british', 'england', 'germany'), and sentence structure. Punctuation is also problematic, with unnecessary commas and missing spaces after periods. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are almost always faulty, leading to a lack of clarity. The range of structures is very limited, relying on repetitive, simple sentence patterns.

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