Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pie chart compares the proportion of British students at one of the institutes in England who could speak multiple languages in addition to English in 2000 and 2010. Overall, in the first diagram, no other language represents the largest proportion; in the second, German represents the smallest proportion.
The percentage of Spanish is 20%, and then it will decrease to 10%. The percentage of French will grow to 15%, and then decline to 10%. The percentage of German will stay constant. The percentage of the two other languages will decline to 10%, then climb to 15%.
The percentage of no other language will drop to 30%, and then rise to 35%. The percentage of another language will drop to 30%, and then it will rise to 35%. British students are able to speak multiple languages in 2000 The percentage of Spanish will lead in 2000 and then declines to ten percent in 2010.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarise the data but fails to provide a clear overview or accurately report the main features. The description of the trends is confusing and often contradicts the visual data provided in the charts. For example, stating that German 'stays constant' when the data shows a change, or describing percentages that do not align with the charts, indicates a failure to accurately interpret the information. The response lacks a logical selection of data, focusing on isolated figures rather than meaningful comparisons or trends. To improve, you must ensure that your data points are accurate and that you group information logically to highlight significant changes over the decade.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the internal structure is weak. The progression of ideas is disjointed, and the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and repetitive. Phrases like 'The percentage of...' are used at the start of almost every sentence, which creates a monotonous flow and fails to link ideas effectively. There is a lack of clear logical progression between the sentences, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between 2000 and 2010. Using a wider variety of linking words and transition phrases would help to improve the flow and clarity of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on basic structures and simple nouns like 'percentage' and 'proportion'. There is little evidence of less common lexical items or an ability to use vocabulary with precision. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of variety in your word choice makes the response feel simplistic. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more varied verbs to describe trends (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'surpassed', 'remained stable') and use a broader range of academic vocabulary to describe the data more precisely.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response uses a limited range of sentence structures, primarily relying on simple sentences. There are frequent errors in tense usage, such as using the future tense ('will grow', 'will decline') to describe past data from 2000 and 2010. This is a significant grammatical error that affects the accuracy of your reporting. While the errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be noticeable. To improve, focus on using the correct past tense for historical data and attempt to incorporate more complex sentence structures, such as using subordinate clauses to compare data points.
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