Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pie chart illustrates the data shows the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in two different years: 2000 and 2010.
To begin with, it becomes clear noticeable that, At first, there are seven options available firstly, it is no other language speakers was 30% which was the highest speakers in 2000 and increased to 35% and highest language which was spoken in 2010. Next, French speakers was 15% in 2000 and decreased to 10% people mainly prefer other languages in 2010. Later, German speakers was 10% in 2000 and remained constant in 2010 which is 10%. Meanwhile, Spanish speakers was 20% in 2000 and reduced to 10% the Spanish speakers move towards to other languages in 2010. Eventually, Another language speakers was 15% in 2000 and rose to 20% in 2010 which is increased to 5%. Finally, Two other languages speakers was 10% in 2000 and increased to 15% in 2010 so the percentage of speakers increased.
Overall it becomes apparent that, the highest language which spoken was No other language which means people prefer English language more over other languages.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all the data points provided in the charts, which is a positive aspect. However, the summary is essentially a list of figures rather than a cohesive report. While main features are identified, the analysis lacks depth and the comparison between years is mechanical. The overview provided at the end is somewhat repetitive and does not effectively synthesize the trends. To improve, focus on grouping the data (e.g., languages that increased vs. decreased) rather than listing every category sequentially, and ensure the overview highlights the most significant changes rather than just restating the 'no language' category.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response uses some cohesive devices like 'To begin with', 'Next', and 'Meanwhile', but these are used in a mechanical and repetitive way. The paragraphing is problematic; the body paragraph is a single, dense block of text that makes it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of ideas. There is a lack of logical flow between sentences, as the text reads like a series of isolated statements rather than a unified report. Improving the use of paragraphing and varying the transition signals would significantly enhance the readability and logical structure of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic structures like 'speakers was X%'. There are several awkward phrasings, such as 'it becomes clear noticeable' and 'the Spanish speakers move towards to other languages'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate flexibility or precision. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more varied reporting verbs (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'experienced a decline') and avoid repeating the same sentence structure for every data point. The current vocabulary is adequate for basic communication but lacks the sophistication required for higher bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'French speakers was 15%') and sentence construction. There are several run-on sentences and punctuation issues that impede clarity. While there is an attempt at complex structures, they are often faulty or incorrectly punctuated. The majority of the sentences are simple, and the lack of control over basic grammar significantly affects the quality of the writing. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and ensuring each sentence has a clear, correct structure would be a good starting point for improvement.
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