Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pie chart illustrates the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in two different years: 2000 and 2010.
To begin with, it becomes noticeable that, At first, there are seven options available firstly, it is no other language speakers was 30% which were the highest speakers in 2000 and increased to 35% and highest language which were spoken in 2010. Next, French speakers were 15% in 2000 and decreased to 10% people mainly prefer other languages in 2010. Later, German speakers were 10% in 2000 and remained constant in 2010 which is 10%. Meanwhile, Spanish speakers were 20% in 2000 and reduced to 10% the Spanish speakers move towards to other languages in 2010. Eventually, Another language speakers were 15% in 2000 and rose to 20% in 2010 which is increased to 5%. Finally, Two other languages speakers were 10% in 2000 and increased to 15% in 2010 so the percentage of speakers increased.
Overall it becomes apparent that, the highest language which spoken was No other language which means people prefer the English language more over other languages.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main features and comparing the data between 2000 and 2010. However, the presentation is somewhat mechanical and repetitive, listing figures for each category without synthesising the information effectively. While the key trends are mentioned, the analysis lacks a clear overview of the most significant changes, such as the overall decline in language diversity. The inclusion of personal interpretation, such as 'people prefer the English language more', is unnecessary in an academic report. To improve, focus on grouping data points logically rather than listing them chronologically or category by category.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the internal flow is hindered by awkward transitions and repetitive sentence structures. Phrases like 'To begin with', 'Next', 'Later', and 'Eventually' are used mechanically, which makes the progression feel forced rather than natural. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the sentence 'the Spanish speakers move towards to other languages', which is grammatically confusing and disrupts the logical flow. The use of cohesive devices is limited and often inaccurate, which impacts the overall readability of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on basic terms like 'speakers', 'increased', and 'decreased'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'highest language which were spoken' and 'no other language speakers', which are unnatural. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey the basic meaning, but it lacks the precision and variety required for higher bands. To improve, the student should incorporate more varied reporting verbs and nouns, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a decline'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'no other language speakers was 30%'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward sentence construction. The student relies mostly on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors, such as 'which were the highest speakers in 2000 and increased to 35% and highest language which were spoken in 2010'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the misuse of commas and capitalization within sentences. A greater focus on sentence variety and proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy is needed.
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