Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The charts illustrates the proportions of British students to speak other language in contrast to English at one England university during in one decade.
there was a slight difference which observed during a decade related to different language. the biggest part contributes to no other language at start which minor increase after that.
in 2000 big part of the chart describe to no other langauge that is slightly enhance in 2010. but the German language is like to be similar in 2000 and 2010. Spanish and French language in 2000 was 10 percent and it decrease in 2010
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement score. While the student attempts to describe the charts, the information is presented in a very fragmented and incomplete manner. Key features, such as specific percentages for all categories, are missing or inaccurately reported. The summary lacks a clear overview or a logical selection of data points, and the analysis is too brief to adequately address the task requirements. To improve, the student must provide a more comprehensive report that includes an introduction, a clear overview of the main trends, and detailed comparisons of the data provided in the charts.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks a clear structure and logical progression. The text is composed of a few short, disjointed sentences rather than well-developed paragraphs. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas together, making the flow of information difficult to follow. For instance, the transition between the description of the 'no other language' category and the specific languages is abrupt. To improve, the student should focus on using linking words (e.g., 'however', 'in contrast', 'furthermore') and organizing the report into distinct paragraphs for the introduction, overview, and body details.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, which restricts the ability to describe the data precisely. Phrases like 'big part' and 'slightly enhance' are imprecise and do not reflect the academic tone required for IELTS Task 1. There are also errors in word choice, such as 'the charts illustrates' (subject-verb agreement) and 'describe to no other langauge'. The student needs to expand their range of vocabulary to include more precise terms for describing trends, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuation', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a decline'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede clarity. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement ('The charts illustrates'), article usage, and sentence construction ('there was a slight difference which observed'). The sentence structures are predominantly simple and often incomplete. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures, which are necessary for higher band scores. To improve, the student should focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and work on using a wider variety of grammatical structures, including complex sentences.
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