Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The charts below show the proportions the British student at one university of England and show the able of speak other languages into English sow the years of 2000 and 2010. Than show the statement by selecting and reporting main features and comparisons.

Show the percentage of the years 2000 show the no other languages speaking

30 percentage and the French speaking 15 percentage and the German language speaking 10 percentage and the Spanish speaking 20 percentage or Another languages speaking 15 percentage and the last of two others languages speaking 10 percentage..

Secondly the year of 2010 show the different languages and show the percentage of speaking languages . The first of language name no other languages show the 35 percentage and the second language French language 10 percentage and the third of language the name of German language 10 percentage

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. Furthermore, the content is incomplete; the description of the 2010 data is cut off mid-sentence, and the response lacks a clear overview or summary of the main trends. The student lists data points rather than synthesising information or making meaningful comparisons between the two years. To improve, you must ensure all data is presented, provide a clear summary of the main features, and meet the minimum length requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks a logical structure. While there is an attempt to use transition words like 'Secondly', the overall progression is disjointed. The text is essentially a list of data points rather than a cohesive report. Paragraphing is not used effectively to separate the introduction from the body, and the lack of a concluding summary makes the response feel unfinished. To improve, use clear paragraph breaks and linking phrases to connect ideas, such as 'In contrast to 2000' or 'While the proportion of X increased, Y saw a decline'.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'show the percentage of' are used repeatedly, which makes the writing monotonous. There are also significant issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'the able of speak' instead of 'the ability to speak' and 'no other languages speaking' instead of 'students who spoke no other languages'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information accurately or professionally. You should focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary for describing charts, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', and 'accounted for'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, incorrect word forms (e.g., 'the able of speak'), and missing articles. Sentence structures are simple and often fragmented, particularly in the second paragraph. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary double periods used throughout. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and practice using articles (a/an/the) correctly. Reviewing basic verb tenses will also help improve the clarity of your writing.

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