Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The pie charts above illustrates the proportions of British students at one university in England who were speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
Overall, the percentage of British students able to speaks other languages other than English, in 2000 other languages is 30 percentage and Spanish is 20 percent moreover these both are higher than others ,same as in 2010.
The percentage of British student in 2000, Spanish speaker is 20 percent moreover two other languages is 10 percent, French 15 percent, Germany 10 percent,
any other languages is 15 percents .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully address the task. While you have identified some data points, the summary is incomplete and lacks a comprehensive comparison of the two years. The overview is underdeveloped, and the data reporting is fragmented. To improve, you must ensure all categories are clearly described and compared across both years. The current length prevents you from providing a fully developed response, leading to a penalty for failing to address all parts of the task adequately.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a clear logical progression. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the sentences are disjointed and the connection between ideas is weak. The use of cohesive devices is limited and often misused, such as the repetitive and awkward use of 'moreover'. The structure does not facilitate a smooth flow of information, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the two years. To improve, focus on using transition words more effectively and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'percentage' and 'languages' throughout the text. There are also errors in word form and usage, such as 'speaks' instead of 'speaking' and 'Germany' instead of 'German'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands. To improve, try to incorporate a wider variety of reporting verbs and synonyms for data-related terms, and ensure you use the correct adjective forms for languages and nationalities.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
There are frequent grammatical errors that impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('charts... illustrates', 'students... speaks') and incorrect sentence structures ('in 2000 other languages is 30 percentage'). The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with errors. Punctuation is also inconsistent. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and sentence construction. Practice writing complex sentences using subordinating conjunctions to improve your grammatical range and accuracy.
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