Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The pie charts demonstrate the proportion of British students at university in England who were able to speak more than one languages in addition to English in 200o and 2010. Overall , the most significant figure of a chart is Spanish and French only . Now turning to details , the highest percentage in 2000 is no other language which is 30 percent . In contrast to it , the highest percentage in 2010 is also a no other language which is 35 percent . The percentage of German language is same in both years . the French in 200 is 15 and in 2010 is 10 percent . Another language in both years have a difference of 5 percent which is between 15 to 20 percent . The percentage of Spanish language In 2000 and 2010 is 20 to 10 percentage . The two other languages in 2000 is 10 percent and in 2010 it is 15 percent .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the task by identifying the main features, such as the 'no other language' category. However, the analysis is inconsistent and contains several inaccuracies regarding the data. For instance, you state that German is the same in both years, but the chart shows a decrease from 10% to 5%. Furthermore, the description of the data is often confusing, such as the claim that 'another language' has a difference of 5 percent between 15 to 20 percent, which is unclear. To improve, ensure you accurately transcribe the data points and provide a more logical comparison between the two years rather than listing figures in isolation.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organised into paragraphs, but the flow of information is disjointed. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Overall' and 'In contrast to it', the transitions between sentences are often mechanical or awkward. The paragraphing is also problematic, as the second paragraph is a long, dense block of text that lacks clear logical progression. To improve, use linking words to connect related ideas more smoothly and ensure each paragraph has a clear focus, such as grouping languages by their trends (e.g., those that increased versus those that decreased).

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic structures like 'the percentage of... is'. There are also errors in word choice and phrasing, such as 'the most significant figure of a chart' and 'no other language which is 30 percent'. You also struggle with accurate terminology for data description. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'experienced a decline', and ensure you use precise terminology when referring to the categories provided in the charts.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with articles ('the French', 'the German language'), subject-verb agreement ('The two other languages in 2000 is'), and pluralisation ('more than one languages'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas and periods. While the meaning is generally understandable, these errors are frequent and occasionally impede the flow of reading. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that articles are used correctly before nouns.

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