Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The graph show the pooporation of british students at one university in england who were able to speak other language to english in 2000 and 2010

In 2000 england university to speak other languages in edition to english first of all spainsh 20 persent and15 persent french only and 10 persent german only 30 persent no other language and 15 persent another languages and 15 persent french at least the languages spoken is two other languages that all types of languages to speak other languages in edition to english in 2000

In 2010 british students ble to speak languages other than english 10 % spainsh 10% french 10%german 35% no other languages 20%another languages ant at the least 15% two others languages that all types of languages that british students able to speak languages other languages other than english in 2010

l am also explain the the both diagram please cheak the all explanation and report

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task by summarizing the data for 2000 and 2010. However, the information is presented in a disorganized, list-like fashion rather than as a coherent report. The data points are often inaccurate or confusingly stated (e.g., '15 persent french only and 10 persent german only 30 persent no other language'). There is no clear overview or comparison of the main trends, such as the increase in students with no other language or the shift in specific language preferences. The response fails to synthesize the information effectively, resulting in a fragmented summary that does not meet the requirements for a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks logical organization and progression. While there is an attempt to separate the years into paragraphs, the internal structure of these paragraphs is chaotic. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas, and the sentences are disjointed. The final sentence is an inappropriate meta-commentary ('l am also explain the the both diagram please cheak the all explanation and report') which does not belong in an academic report. The overall flow is severely hindered by the lack of punctuation and clear sentence boundaries.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is extremely limited and repetitive. There are frequent spelling errors such as 'pooporation' for proportion, 'spainsh' for Spanish, and 'persent' for percent. The student relies on basic, inaccurate phrasing to describe the data, such as 'at least the languages spoken is two other languages'. There is no attempt to use academic vocabulary or precise terminology to describe trends or proportions. The range is insufficient to convey the information clearly, and the persistent spelling errors make the text difficult to read.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical control is very weak. The response consists of fragmented, run-on sentences with almost no correct punctuation. There are consistent errors in basic grammar, such as subject-verb agreement ('The graph show'), article usage, and word order. Complex structures are absent, and even simple sentences are frequently marred by errors that impede clarity. The lack of capitalization and the misuse of prepositions further detract from the accuracy of the writing. The text is essentially a series of poorly connected phrases rather than grammatically sound sentences.

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