Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
the bar charts below depicts the information about the data of the students of british university located in England who are eligible to speak English as well as other languages, in 2000 and 2010. the data has been given in the percentage.
to begin with, no other languages students are maximum in both years and only German speaking students are equal and minimum in both year also. 20% students are able to speak Spanish language in 2000 in addition, in 2010 they has inly 10%. on the other hand, the number of French spoken british students are high in there 2010 rather than 2000 these are 15% and 20%. the british students are able to speak two other languages 10% in 2000 and 15% percent in 2010. moreover, in both bar charts shows the british students who are only speaking English language no other language can speak are maximum 30% in 2000 and 35% in 2010
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the task by identifying the main features of the charts. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear overview or summary of the trends. While you mention specific percentages, the comparison between the two years is occasionally confusing, such as the statement about German-speaking students being 'equal and minimum'. The report would benefit from a more structured approach, perhaps grouping the languages by those that increased and those that decreased. The data is presented, but the lack of a cohesive summary of the overall trends limits the score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organized into paragraphs, but the flow between sentences is often disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes repetitive or misused, such as 'in addition, in 2010 they has inly 10%'. The referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the two years. Paragraphing is present, but the internal logic within the paragraphs needs to be strengthened to ensure a smoother progression of ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but remains quite basic and repetitive. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'no other languages students are maximum' and 'French spoken british students'. You rely on simple descriptors and struggle with accurate collocations. To improve, you should focus on using more precise terminology for describing data trends, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuated', or 'remained stable', rather than repeating 'maximum' or 'minimum'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('they has inly 10%', 'charts shows') and incorrect sentence structures. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the punctuation is inconsistent, with missing capital letters at the start of sentences. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and syntax prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on sentence construction and proofreading for basic errors will significantly improve your score.
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