Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The information is about the proportion of the students at one university in England able to speak other languages such as Spanish, French,German, an other languages Two other languages, No other languages in addition to British in 2000 to 2010.And select the information and comparisons where relevant.
In 2000 British student able to speak languages other then UK. In 2000 student speak the other languages. first, Spanish language speak 20% ,second Another languages asked 15%, next French language told 15%, more then No other languages speak 305, second last German language asked 10% , last Two other language speak 10% .
The British student able to speak languages other then the England in 2010. The Spanish language speak 10%, and the next French language is told 10%, and more then German speak 10%, and the next No other language asked 355%, second last Another speak 20%, and the last Two other languages speak 15% languages in 2010.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear summary or meaningful comparisons. The data presentation is highly inaccurate; for example, the student lists '305' and '355%' for categories, which are impossible figures given the context of percentages. The overview is missing, and the information is presented as a disjointed list of figures rather than an analytical report. The response fails to identify the main trends or significant changes between 2000 and 2010, resulting in a failure to adequately cover the requirements of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the internal structure is weak. There is no logical progression of ideas, and the use of cohesive devices is extremely limited and often misused (e.g., 'first', 'second', 'next'). The referencing is unclear, and the lack of logical flow makes the report difficult to follow. The writing relies on repetitive sentence structures, which hinders the overall coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student uses basic terms like 'speak', 'languages', and 'asked' repeatedly, often in incorrect contexts (e.g., 'asked' instead of 'represented'). There is no attempt to use a range of vocabulary appropriate for describing data, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuated', 'decreased', or 'accounted for'. The errors in word choice significantly impede the clarity of the information provided.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is very limited, consisting almost entirely of simple, error-prone sentences. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement, tense usage, and sentence construction (e.g., 'British student able to speak', 'more then No other languages speak 305'). Punctuation is also problematic, with inconsistent spacing and capitalization. These frequent errors cause difficulty for the reader and prevent the communication of accurate information.
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