Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given pie chart demonstrate that the proportions of British at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

In the beginning, the students of British are able to speak various languages like German, Spanish, French and any others rather than English in 2010. Moreover, the ratio of no other language has been the highest over 30% accumulatively, while the two other languages and German language both are very lowest. In addition, the percentage of students in 2010 illustrate that the ratio of mo other languages has been highest again while being the Spanish and French remain low.

Overall, the percentage of both no other languages remain highest in 2000 and 2010 while the ratio of french to stay normal. Furthermore, the percentage of students about two other languages in 2000 has been lowest over 10% however, the ratio of two other languages stay highest 15% accumulatively. So the improvements of students is more in 2010.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear or accurate summary of the data. The description of the charts is confusing, and the figures mentioned (e.g., 'over 30%') do not clearly align with the visual data provided. The response lacks a clear overview and fails to make meaningful comparisons between the two years. Key features, such as the significant shift in the 'no other language' category or the specific proportions for individual languages, are not clearly identified or reported. The writing is often vague, making it difficult for the reader to understand the trends shown in the charts.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is unclear. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Moreover' and 'Furthermore', but they are often used incorrectly or do not logically connect the sentences. The referencing is frequently confusing, particularly when discussing the categories of languages. The lack of logical flow makes the report difficult to follow, and the relationship between the data points and the commentary is often disjointed.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'accumulatively' used incorrectly to describe percentages, and 'stay normal' which is not appropriate for describing statistical data. The student struggles to use precise terminology for reporting data, relying on basic descriptors like 'highest' or 'lowest' without providing the necessary context or accurate figures. Spelling errors, such as 'mo' instead of 'no', also detract from the overall quality.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the given pie chart demonstrate'), incorrect sentence structure, and awkward phrasing. The use of articles and prepositions is inconsistent. While there is an attempt to use complex sentences, these are often poorly constructed and contain errors that make the meaning unclear. The lack of control over basic sentence structure significantly impacts the readability of the report.

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