Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

by the study we can see that 30 percent of the studente dont spesk another langage in 2000 in comparison with 2010 the percent grow with 5 percent ad became to 35 percent

the spanish was in 20 percent and came done between 2000 and 2010 and regress to 10 percent

french to deminute in during the years and regress about 5 percent in the other side other langage and german was becam more then with 5 percent

we can determinat that after 10 years the langage come more diversive and student learn langage and there is a diversification of nation and origins of student in the university and this increse the multilangage speking and the no speeking to come more than 2000 and ad more other langages thas is explind by multicultures student in the university

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you have attempted to identify some trends, the analysis is incomplete and lacks a clear overview of the main features. The data reporting is often inaccurate (e.g., stating Spanish 'regressed to 10 percent' without clear context) and the interpretation of the data is speculative rather than based on the provided charts. To improve, ensure you provide a clear summary of the overall trends, use accurate data points, and avoid personal speculation about the causes of the changes, as the task requires a factual report of the information presented.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks paragraphing, which makes it difficult to follow the logical progression of ideas. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences and ideas together, resulting in a disjointed flow. The text reads as a series of isolated statements rather than a cohesive report. To improve, you should organize your response into clear paragraphs: an introduction, a summary of main features, and specific details. Use linking words such as 'however', 'in contrast', 'furthermore', and 'consequently' to connect your ideas and improve the overall structure of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors such as 'studente', 'spesk', 'langage', 'deminute', and 'diversive'. The word choices are often imprecise or incorrect, such as 'regress' used to describe a decrease in percentage, or 'come more diversive' instead of 'became more diverse'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information accurately. You should focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary for describing charts, such as 'increase', 'decrease', 'fluctuate', 'proportion', and 'percentage', and practice using these words in the correct context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, and sentence structure. Examples include 'the percent grow with 5 percent', 'french to deminute', and 'the langage come more diversive'. These errors are pervasive and often impede the reader's understanding of the intended meaning. The response relies almost entirely on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences are unsuccessful. You need to focus on basic sentence construction, correct verb tenses, and subject-verb agreement before attempting more complex grammatical structures.

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