Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The pie chart percentage of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages and English between 2000 and 2010.
Over all, British student speak in 2000 more Spanish and less other languages whereas in 2010 decreased speaking Spanish or French and they speak other languages increased.
In Begin,In 2000 many British students speaks 20% Spanish and the large number of people speak no other language and the 15% person speaking French or other languages whereas 10% two other languages or more German only they speaks.
In sharp contrast to that ,the year of 2000 mostly British students no speak other languages 35% or more people speak around 10% in Spanish or French In addition 15% two other languages In addition British students 20% speaks another languages further more they are speaking only the 10 percentage language German only they compare to 2010 era they are same proportion speaking in the British.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task by mentioning some percentages from the charts, such as 20% Spanish in 2000 and 35% no other language, but the overall summary of main features and comparisons is extremely confused. The text struggles to present a clear overview, with contradictory or muddled statements regarding the years 2000 and 2010. For instance, the second paragraph states that British students spoke more Spanish in 2000 and less in 2010, but the detailed breakdown becomes very difficult to follow due to poor data selection and reporting. Furthermore, the introduction fails to properly frame the charts as an overview, resulting in an under-developed response that only partially satisfies the requirements of the task. This aligns closely with the Band 4 descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The organization of information is severely lacking, and ideas are not arranged coherently. The text is divided into short, disjointed paragraphs, but the progression of information breaks down entirely. Cohesive devices are either missing, inadequate, or used inappropriately, such as 'In Begin,In 2000' and 'In sharp contrast to that ,the year of 2000', which creates logical confusion rather than guiding the reader. Additionally, referencing is frequently unclear, making it hard to determine which year or statistic is being discussed. Paragraphing is not used effectively to structure the comparison. These issues reflect the characteristics of Band 4, where information and ideas lack a clear overall progression.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and restricted. Throughout the text, the student relies on elementary words like 'speak', 'people', 'languages', and basic numbers. There are numerous inappropriate word choices and collocations, such as 'person speaking French', 'no speak other languages', and '10 percentage language German only'. These lexical inaccuracies, combined with repetitive phrasing, significantly strain the reader and obscure meaning. While the task requires discussing languages and percentages, the student's limited control over word choice prevents them from expressing ideas precisely. This performance corresponds to Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is extremely weak, with a very limited range of structures. Almost every sentence contains major errors in tense, word order, and clause construction, such as 'Over all, British student speak in 2000 more Spanish', 'whereas in 2010 decreased speaking Spanish', and 'they compare to 2010 era they are same proportion speaking'. Complex structures are attempted but are consistently faulty, and simple sentences frequently lack basic grammatical components like correct verb forms. Errors are so frequent that they constantly distort meaning and cause severe difficulty for the reader. This matches the criteria for Band 4, where errors are dominant and impede communication.
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