Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The rendered pie charts illustrates the information about the learners of Britishers who studied in UK university who were capable to speak other different languages instead of english between 2000 and 2010
To commence with,one third of the total proportion of students spoke English. Whereas, one fourth of the section of British learners spoke spanish very well.while,15% belonged those who spoke french and another languages respectively.Contrastingly, only 10% students spoke german and two other languages in the year of 2000.
Moving further to the another pie which depicts that in 2010,the percentile of no other languages spoken by students was 35%. However, one fourth of the percentage of those learners who belonged to french language and 15% was two other languages. Interestingly, a minute proportion of those who spoke spanish,french and German which was 10% respectively.
In conclusion, it is clearly seen that the highest section was english spoken students and lowest was german spoken in Both the years .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the charts comparing the proportions of British students able to speak other languages in 2000 and 2010. The student successfully reports key data points, such as the 33% (one-third) and 35% figures for English only, and makes relevant comparisons across the two years, concluding with an overview. However, there are some inaccuracies in reporting the precise data from the charts (for instance, misinterpreting the categories in 2010 where Spanish, French, and German are stated as 10% respectively, whereas the chart shows different breakdowns). Furthermore, expression is at times unclear regarding categories like 'two other languages'. Despite these minor inaccuracies, all parts of the task are addressed, earning a Band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into an introduction, two body paragraphs representing the two charts, and a brief conclusion, demonstrating an attempt at logical organization. However, the progression is hindered by awkward transitions such as 'To commence with' and 'Moving further to the another pie'. Cohesive devices are sometimes faulty or mechanically applied, and referencing is occasionally unclear, such as 'belonged those who spoke' and 'percentile of no other languages spoken'. Paragraphing is present and logically separates the two visual stimuli, but overall structural flow is limited. This performance aligns well with the Band 5.0 descriptors for Coherence and Cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student attempts an adequate range of vocabulary suitable for task 1, using terms such as 'proportion', 'percentile', and 'contrastingly'. However, there are noticeable lexical errors and awkward collocations throughout the text, including 'learners of Britishers', 'english spoken students', and 'german spoken'. Word choices are sometimes unnatural or imprecise, such as using 'percentile' instead of 'percentage' or 'proportion'. Spelling and word-form errors, like 'spanish' and 'french' lacking capital letters in some instances, also occur. The vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey the general message, but frequent inaccuracies place it firmly at a Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writing contains a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but grammatical accuracy is weak. There are numerous foundational errors, including missing prepositions, incorrect verb forms ('The rendered pie charts illustrates'), and faulty relative clauses ('belonged to french language'). Punctuation is also problematic, with missing periods, unnecessary commas, and incomplete sentence structures such as fragments ('while,15% belonged those...'). These frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader and impede smooth communication at times. Due to the high density of structural errors relative to the length of the text, a Band 4.5 or 5.0 is appropriate; leaning towards the descriptors, a Band 5.0 reflects the basic control attempted.
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